^ nice rhythm. Good flow.
You're the st poetry expert in my book
I normally don't share my softer side with the board but I wrote this poem today and thought it was uplifitng
Somethin'
Somethin' somethin'
In my pocket
Somethin' somethin'
Not a rocket
Somethin' somethin'
Just say "fok it"
I got me a sack of Takis
^ nice rhythm. Good flow.
You're the st poetry expert in my book
Beautiful piece tbh.
I was feeling down today but now I feel better. Thanks!
Second verse (a little more abstract)
Somethin' somethin'
In my pocket
Somethin' somethin'
Tyler Locket
Somethin' somethin'
Davy Crocket
I present to you a box of chocolates
I liked you better before you sold out on that second verse. You were more "real" to me when you were putting out organic material like in the OP.
This is really sad, the boy can't do poetry either.
SFS, stick to talking movies and TV shows, you're good at that, ok? Stay away from them blues, track and poetry, yep...ya suck.
Take notes slugger.
"Somthin' "
Somthin' in the mornin'
Somthin' late at night
as long as my baby
is given me Somthin'
everything will be alright
Stold this from Red Foxx
Soldier writes home to his wife, honey baby, if I don't get home pretty soon, I might have to start buying somthin'
Wife writes back
Honey baby, if you don't start sending some money home pretty soon, I might have to start selling somthin'
Ha~~~
Last edited by Avante; 06-06-2018 at 07:12 PM.
SFS, you're in a trailer park out in west Texas, your old bulldog just died and your woman ran off with your brother. Let's have a poem, ok?
It just hit me, now watch the boy run from this.....also.
Give Avante a ficticous scenario/situation and watch the magic. After SFS does something.
Last edited by Avante; 06-06-2018 at 06:59 PM.
Fic ious scenario:
Avante is athletic and really well versed in track and field. He knows music very well.
Now make a poem about you shutting the up
"Avante"
he just wouldn't shut up
both night and day
it was just yakyakyak
and he wouldn't go away
he bugged everyone
was a pain in the ass
and if I had a gun
he'd breath his last
he thinks he knows it all
brag brag brag
when in reality
he's a know nothing
Avante do us all a favor
blow yourself away
no more yakyakyak
from an idiot like you
oh what a glorious day
See I do things, no running away, no shuckin' and jivin' no tap dancing, no excuses. I jump right in and get it done.
That's horrible.
You should ask sfs for advice
Thats legitimate. The first verse just came to me. Then the final line of the second verse came to me. But I forced Locket and Crocket.
You hit the nail on the head.
SFS planted the seed.
We need a Poem Compe ion right here. We are given a fictious situation and have to poem it, yep, everyone can play.
Example
Poster....a cute girl waiting on a train.
"The Wait"
she stood there waitin'
with the rain pourin' down
she was waitin for her man
he was on that old southbound
"Clipper Nation"
what can we say
about this boy
he's never happy
never shows any joy
it's a constant wimper
then a little whine
everything is negative
all the time
never says a good thing
doubt he ever has
it's alway bah humbug
and everyone is a
^^
You have no sense of meter. I find it really hard to believe you were as good a dancer as you think you were.
Stop it guy, ok? It's looking really stupid now, alright? I've had my poems read to more than one class while at COS, had a couple published in a paper.
Won at least a dozen dance contests, have done the movie thing where it's just the two of us out there while everyone watched......a few times. Ran up and down the west coast for 10 years before meeting Judy.
This...every single thing you say or do MUST suck...is really getting stupid now, ok coward?
Pick a fictious situation little guy and let's poem up,ok?
Little man, this was suppose to be stupid, right?
Somethin' somethin'
In my pocket
Somethin' somethin'
Not a rocket
Somethin' somethin'
Just say "fok it"
I got me a sack of Takis
Wow didn't know SFS was such a gifited poet. Not sure why I am surprised though, it appears there is nothing this man can't do. The board is truly blessed to have him here.
Dude, he can't talk track, he can't talk them blues, his poetry sucks, yep...real life.
Go ahead ask him to talk track or them blues. he can't. The poetry, hahahaha~~~
So jealous
You really struggle with syllables and pentameter.
No I don't guy, been having my poems praised since I was a little kid.
Wrote a poem about falling for a creative writing class, teacher read it to the class, only poem she read. Then I had a english class that called for a poem, so I submitted that same poem, yep.....read to the class.
Not going to work little man, I know I'm good.
Give SFS a fictious situation and watch the mess, come on do it.
He's not only the UNDISPUTED ST Expert on Track and Blues, but he's also the poet laureate of this place.
Is there nothing SFS doesn't do expertly?
This is good?
Somethin'
Somethin' somethin'
In my pocket
Somethin' somethin'
Not a rocket
Somethin' somethin'
Just say "fok it"
I got me a sack of Takis
Wow, do we have some know nothings here or what?
It would kinda work if it was just a tad bit realistic, ok?
It loses something when it's...
Avante is fat, has zits, bad breath, no teeth, ugly, stupid, bad skin, he stinks, bow legged, knocked kneed, pot belly, dinky , moron.
Ha~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
The fun I have on these boards is watching how people just can't handle anyone who knows stuff and brags about it, they come totally unglued and it's funny watching how they act.
OBVIOUSLY....SFS don't know , nobody is blind here we all see it. OBVIOUSLY....the guy has no talent at all with poetry, we all see it, but........look at what must be played, hahahahaha~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
If anyone here had any confidence in the boy at all they'd love to see him kick my ass in track trivia, why is it nobody is setting this butt kicking up,yep.......they know SFS don't know . All this...the fake contest was already done,you lost....is just saying....no way we let you beat him up in a real contest.
Last edited by Avante; 06-06-2018 at 10:41 PM.
SFS poem this...
It's pushin' midnight, a lone sailor is on lookout, he sees the lights of Hong Kong harbor, take it.
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