To All Writers (Who take themselves seriously)

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

Now I know that perhaps Spurstalk isn't exactly a dwelling
ground for writers, whether it be novelists, song-writers, poets
or aspiring journalists.

But I'm almost certain there are some writers here, & I even have half
a mind to say there are some exceptional writers here.

Now, I've always been a song-writer, I've been playing guitar & bass for
13 years (I'm currently 21). I pride myself on my vocabulary, I'd say that perhaps my punctuation isn't top notch, but hey, neither was Jack Kerouac's.
Not a day goes by that I don't learn new words, or phrases.

Anyways. Recently, I've become very driven to write a screen-play, or maybe just a novel, but I've found it quite difficult to come up with a premise..
Obviously, I'd want it to be something profound, something deep, but also a premise that is perfect for building upon, characters & events.

I've come up with one, but it's very raw. I'd like to share it, and see
what you think, but first, I want to hear what other writers on this forum
have come up with. Don't worry, this isn't so I can steal your ideas.. It is to just create a forum with a creative writing environment, talk about it, share ideas and give feedback.

Feel free to reply.

Thanks!

-Mark

[silverblk mystix]

First go to my music thread to see what you are up against.

Then post your idea.

[Lincoln]

21 year old that is 5'11 220 :lmao
:lmao fat motherfucker
:lmao obesity is a disease

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

Corso, I'm not sure I understand your post. My apologies.

& Silver, I'm not sure I understand your post either.
If this music that you yourself have written? because I
would definitely love to hear it.

[silverblk mystix]

Corso, I'm not sure I understand your post. My apologies.

& Silver, I'm not sure I understand your post either.
If this music that you yourself have written? because I
would definitely love to hear it.

Look further on down the page...Sharing My Music...

15 original songs (I don't sing) I wrote and played most of the instruments.
Guitar is my main thing.

Wrote words and music.

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

Just heard a few songs.
You're very talented brother, it's great to talk
to a fellow musician here on ST.
But really, great great music.

Here is one of mine, I do sing, & yes I do suck
at singing, but tell me what you think. I like the guitar
is pretty decent.

http://soundcloud.com/changing-winds/xishi-acoustic

[Avante]

Now I know that perhaps Spurstalk isn't exactly a dwelling
ground for writers, whether it be novelists, song-writers, poets
or aspiring journalists.

But I'm almost certain there are some writers here, & I even have half
a mind to say there are some exceptional writers here.

Now, I've always been a song-writer, I've been playing guitar & bass for
13 years (I'm currently 21). I pride myself on my vocabulary, I'd say that perhaps my punctuation isn't top notch, but hey, neither was Jack Kerouac's.
Not a day goes by that I don't learn new words, or phrases.

Anyways. Recently, I've become very driven to write a screen-play, or maybe just a novel, but I've found it quite difficult to come up with a premise..
Obviously, I'd want it to be something profound, something deep, but also a premise that is perfect for building upon, characters & events.

I've come up with one, but it's very raw. I'd like to share it, and see
what you think, but first, I want to hear what other writers on this forum
have come up with. Don't worry, this isn't so I can steal your ideas.. It is to just create a forum with a creative writing environment, talk about it, share ideas and give feedback.

Feel free to reply.

Thanks!

-Mark

I've written some poetry, had one of my poems read to the class (local JC) in my creative writing class, then read again to the class in another class that needed a poem. Mine the only poem read. It was.."Gunfighter"

The trick is to read read and read, absorb all you can. It's those influenses that soak in, be a sponge.

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

Thanks Avante, I was looking for a reply just like yours.

I'm sure your poem was nothing short of fantastic.

[Reck]

Look further on down the page...Sharing My Music...

15 original songs (I don't sing) I wrote and played most of the instruments.
Guitar is my main thing.

Wrote words and music.

I have never been to that thread. Will check it out and have a laugh.

[Reck]

Thanks Avante, I was looking for a reply just like yours.

I'm sure your poem was nothing short of fantastic.

:lol

Soak in like a sponge as an google and plagiarize other people's work.

Do yourself a favor and dont take advises from RaZon. rofl

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

I'm not sure what you're talking about Shadow.

Who is RaZon?

[silverblk mystix]

Just heard a few songs.
You're very talented brother, it's great to talk
to a fellow musician here on ST.
But really, great great music.

Here is one of mine, I do sing, & yes I do suck
at singing, but tell me what you think. I like the guitar
is pretty decent.

http://soundcloud.com/changing-winds/xishi-acoustic

Very Nice, my friend.

Your guitar playing, tone, recording, are excellent. Your guitar playing is way ahead of your singing---for now--NO SHAME THERE.

If you are 21 there is a lot of places your voice can go--if there is one regret I have in my progression---it is that I never had confidence in my voice and so I never developed it. You are young enough where you can still develop both and your playing is already really good.

The song is a little rough and the melody could be better but there is a lot of potential there. Songwriting is a learned art.

When I was 21 I was in my Rhandy Rhoads/Van Halen/SRV phase and I wanted to play a million notes a second. I used to take my guitar everywhere and practice 16 hours a day.

Nice work. :toast

[Reck]

I'm not sure what you're talking about Shadow.

Who is RaZon?

RaZon is Avante. The troll of a troll.

[silverblk mystix]

I have never been to that thread. Will check it out and have a laugh.

This ought to be good...

:depressed

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

RaZon is Avante. The troll of a troll.

Oh, I see. From what I've heard, RaZon isn't necessarily
the darling of ST. So maybe I'd do well to heed YOUR advice
instead. Lol.

By the way, I didn't intend for people to share their ideas
so that I may plagiarize them, or for anyone else to do so.
Just clearing that up.

Just wanted people to share ideas, so that they can receive feedback,
as well as myself.

[monosylab1k]

Thread of the millenium

[Reck]

Oh, I see. From what I've heard, RaZon isn't necessarily
the darling of ST. So maybe I'd do well to heed YOUR advice
instead. Lol.

By the way, I didn't intend for people to share their ideas
so that I may plagiarize them, or for anyone else to do so.
Just clearing that up.

Just wanted people to share ideas, so that they can receive feedback,
as well as myself.

I'm not a writer so why would you take my advise? :lol

I'm just warning you RaZon is a troll and gets all his information through google.

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

Very Nice, my friend.

Your guitar playing, tone, recording, are excellent. Your guitar playing is way ahead of your singing---for now--NO SHAME THERE.

If you are 21 there is a lot of places your voice can go--if there is one regret I have in my progression---it is that I never had confidence in my voice and so I never developed it. You are young enough where you can still develop both and your playing is already really good.

The song is a little rough and the melody could be better but there is a lot of potential there. Songwriting is a learned art.

When I was 21 I was in my Rhandy Rhoads/Van Halen/SRV phase and I wanted to play a million notes a second. I used to take my guitar everywhere and practice 16 hours a day.

Nice work. :toast

Thanks man, I appreciate your kind words.
& actually, I recorded this song when I was 18..
I'd say my guitar playing has improved a tad,
but unfortunately, my vocals remain shaky.
but hey, it still works for me, in fact, the scene
where my band plays, has learned to love my vocals.
Bless their hearts, lol.

But you're correct, I plan to improve the vocals,
& if I'm at my ceiling in that area, I will just leave the vocals
to someone else.

[Reck]

This ought to be good...

:depressed

Breathe easy.

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

I'm not a writer so why would you take my advise? :lol

I'm just warning you RaZon is a troll and gets all his information through google.

No I mean, that I take your advice about NOT listening to RaZon.
:lol

[Avante]

:lol

Soak in like a sponge as an google and plagiarize other people's work.

Do yourself a favor and dont take advises from RaZon. rofl

I can see why you prefer to leech off others. You are an idiot. I don't Google, I don't plagiarize. Show me where I do?

Ok moron give me a topic. Not something stupid and lets see about a poem, you got balls?

[silverblk mystix]

Oh, I see. From what I've heard, RaZon isn't necessarily
the darling of ST. So maybe I'd do well to heed YOUR advice
instead. Lol.

By the way, I didn't intend for people to share their ideas
so that I may plagiarize them, or for anyone else to do so.
Just clearing that up.

Just wanted people to share ideas, so that they can receive feedback,
as well as myself.

Listen man, do yourself a favor and don't take anyone's advice on who to blah-blah...

You are intelligent enough to judge people on how they treat you- not how someone else poisoned the well before you got there.

Don't believe me either....see for yourself. Taste your own food and take your own medicine.

fyi

[Reck]

I can see why you prefer to leech off others. You are an idiot. I don't Google, I don't plagiarize. Show me where I do?

Ok moron give me a topic. Not something stupid and lets see about a poem, you got balls?

:lol

Relax now.

[Avante]

No I mean, that I take your advice about NOT listening to RaZon.
:lol

Ignore Shadowmoaner the guy has been here 10 years and has three threads, it pisses him off that he lacks creativity so he follows us around who do moaning around like the bitch he is. A leech!

I was writting everyday for a few years, then I hit a wall. It started getting harder to unleash the juices. I guess I used up the creativity. Now it hits me every now and then.

[Avante]

:lol

Relax now.

Give me a topic dummy, lets see about the poetry.

[Reck]

lol

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

True.

I'm not too familiar with The Club.
I don't know why, but I thought this
was the place to escape trolls, & assholes,
& actually talk to competent people about
competent subjects, like creativity.

But as you can see, two posts in on the first page,
I was already trolled. -__-;

[silverblk mystix]

True.

I'm not too familiar with The Club.
I don't know why, but I thought this
was the place to escape trolls, & assholes,
& actually talk to competent people about
competent subjects, like creativity.

But as you can see, two posts in on the first page,
I was already trolled. -__-;

There is nothing but love in here...

Don't you feel it?

[Avante]

lol

As we can see ...THE LEECH...is so uncreative he can't even come up with something to write a poem about, what a fucking loser.

[Clipper Nation]

As we can see ...THE LEECH...is so uncreative he can't even come up with something to write a poem about, what a fucking loser.

There once was a troll quite retarded...
Called Avante, who usually started...
Dumb, racist threads... was sick in the head...
And on him the whole forum sharted...

[Reck]

As we can see ...THE LEECH...is so uncreative he can't even come up with something to write a poem about, what a fucking loser.

Actually that was in response to you saying I had only 3 threads in 10 years.

lol

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

There is nothing but love in here...

Don't you feel it?

Maybe as musicians, we're the only ones who understand it.
:lol

[silverblk mystix]

Maybe as musicians, we're the only ones who understand it.
:lol

Word.

Werd?

Wurd?

:lmao

[Avante]

There once was a troll quite retarded...
Called Avante, who usually started...
Dumb, racist threads... was sick in the head...
And on him the whole forum sharted...

Clipper Nation has no skills
knows not what to say
so he leeches off all of us
each and every day

he'll bitch
he'll moan
talking smack
while safely hidden at home

you have to pity the guy
it is sad to see
he never ever posted a thread
in his whole history

he prefers to leech
follow us around
looking like a dummy
a fucking clown

[Clipper Nation]

Terrible comeback, B.... my poem was like Ether, and yours was Supa Ugly status AT BEST...

[Clipper Nation]

BTW, I've started seven threads, B...

:lol Regulated

[Avante]

Terrible comeback, B.... my poem was like Ether, and yours was Supa Ugly status AT BEST...

I seriously doubt that, you were schooled as always.

[Avante]

BTW, I've started seven threads, B...

:lol Regulated
You have...0...here. Why is that?

[Clipper Nation]

I seriously doubt that, you were schooled as always.

:lol Has to declare victories for himself when he gets owned
:lol Welches on bets, too
:lol Dishonorable racist

[Clipper Nation]

You have...0...here. Why is that?

Seven threads, bitch... :lol

[Avante]

:lol Has to declare victories for himself when he gets owned
:lol Welches on bets, too
:lol Dishonorable racist

Too stupid to know when he gets schooled
Doesn't know what the bet was
Thinks we are all the same

:rolleyes:rolleyes:rolleyes:rolleyes:rolleyes

[Reck]

LOL RaZon thinks threads here are the only ones that count. :lol

[Avante]

LOL RaZon thinks threads here are the only ones that count. :lol

No I don't I also post on the others boards. We are here however, what you do other places means nothing....here.

"The Leech"

it crawls from leg to leg
looking for something to hump
it's gross looking
kind of a misshapened clump

when it finally
finds it's prey
it hops on
will hump all day

once it gets it fill
it slithers off
satisfied
it had to do nothing
but hop on and ride

[silverblk mystix]

No I don't I also post on the others boards. We are here however, what you do other places means nothing....here.

"The Leech"

it crawls from leg to leg
looking for something to hump
it's gross looking
kind of a misshapened clump

when it finally
finds it's prey
it hops on
will hump all day

once it gets it fill
it slithers off
satisfied
it had to do nothing
but hop on and ride


Answer is;


Things named Chumpie, Alex?

[Clipper Nation]

Too stupid to know when he gets schooled
Doesn't know what the bet was
Thinks we are all the same

:rolleyes:rolleyes:rolleyes:rolleyes:rolleyes

You clearly didn't know what your own bet was since you tried to switch up the rules when you lost, B....

:lol Welcher

[Avante]

You clearly didn't know what your own bet was since you tried to switch up the rules when you lost, B....

:lol Welcher

Bullshit! Dude, you are now looking really stupid, trust me1

[DMC]

Avante's poem:

I know a lot of runners
List them from best to worst
It's not stuff other people know
Unless they Google it first

I know lots of musician names
Ones you probably won't
I keep hoping someone will care
I keep learning that they don't

I attach shitty videos of them
ones that no one sees
as they file through and call me faggot
and bring me to my knees

FUCK YOU ALL

[Clipper Nation]

Son, you made the bet about finding a certain list of sprinters on Google, then tried to claim you meant the original source after you lost when DMC found that list posted by you on another forum.... this is a FACT, B...

You welched... the game is the game, B...

[silverblk mystix]

I think the OP had actual art in mind.

:lmao

[lakerhaterade]

Son, you made the bet about finding a certain list of sprinters on Google, then tried to claim you meant the original source after you lost when DMC found that list posted by you on another forum.... this is a FACT, B...

You welched... the game is the game, B...

That's sound like Stringer Bell preaching' to a youngin

[Avante]

Avante's poem:

I know a lot of runners
List them from best to worst
It's not stuff other people know
Unless they Google it first

I know lots of musician names
Ones you probably won't
I keep hoping someone will care
I keep learning that they don't

I attach shitty videos of them
ones that no one sees
as they file through and call me faggot
and bring me to my knees

FUCK YOU ALL

DMC is simple
he likes it that way
so if you get too complex
he has nothing to say

he knows very little
that is by design
he can only handle so much
in his tiny little mind

so if you confuse him
make him think
he's totally lost
will need a drink

he has no depth
no knowledge of anything
so keep it simple
bling bling bling

[Clipper Nation]

Your ONLY comebacks to anything are "I owned you" or "you don't understand anything" or "you don't spam the board with useless shit threads like me"... :lol

[Avante]

Son, you made the bet about finding a certain list of sprinters on Google, then tried to claim you meant the original source after you lost when DMC found that list posted by you on another forum.... this is a FACT, B...

You welched... the game is the game, B...

Wrong again.

The bet was tell me who would fill the 8 lanes in a best of HBCU 100m sprinting, that was not done. It had nothing at all to do with finding any list. The list he did find was wrong.

[Avante]

Your ONLY comebacks to anything are "I owned you" or "you don't understand anything" or "you don't spam the board with useless shit threads like me"... :lol

Are you ever going to grow up and post threads like us big people?

[lakerhaterade]

Why would anyone start a track and field thread in this subforum?


You're an attention whore if you do that IMO

[Clipper Nation]

So then you don't know everything about track :lol

:lol Google track expert who has wrong information
:lol YouTube music historian with fake record collection
:lol SpursTalk troll, spammer, and welcher

[Clipper Nation]

Are you ever going to grow up and post threads like us big people?

"Big people" don't start useless threads for every thought that pops into their mind, B...

[Avante]

"Big people" don't start useless threads for every thought that pops into their mind, B...

They also don't follow others around telling them what to do when they do nothing at all.

[Clipper Nation]

They also don't follow others around telling them what to do when they do nothing at all.

I do plenty, including calling you on your ignorant bullshit, B...

[Avante]

I do plenty, including calling you on your ignorant bullshit, B...

You do nothing, why lie? You are a follower, you need us because you aint got shit. Give up on the bet you have no clue what it was.

[Clipper Nation]

You do nothing, why lie? You are a follower, you need us because you aint got shit. Give up on the bet you have no clue what it was.

Welch city, bitch... :lol

[Avante]

Welch city, bitch... :lol

Uncreative troll.:lol:lol:lol

[silverblk mystix]

I don't think the OP will come back...:lol

[Clipper Nation]

Uncreative troll.:lol:lol:lol

:lol Deranged troll

[Avante]

So then you don't know everything about track :lol

:lol Google track expert who has wrong information
:lol YouTube music historian with fake record collection
:lol SpursTalk troll, spammer, and welcher

Yes I do know everything about track that's why I had to make some changes. That first list was the 100 "yard" best that's why Willie McGee was there he was a 9.1 WR holder, I had mislabeled it meters when it should have read yards, there is a big difference. I was shown that yards list not meters. Getting it now? Oliver Ford and Rey Robinson had to be on the meters list not the yard one.

I don't have a ton of records, I have a ton of tapes and CD's, 6000-ish.

Show me where I troll?

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

Well, this thread turned out to be very insightful.

[Avante]

Well, this thread turned out to be very insightful.

Sorry Roger honestly. We have too many dumbass kids here who don't know shit, so when anyone shows up who does they freak. It's sad I know.

Are you familiar with the poetry of Langston Hughes and Hart Crane? A couple great authors I like, Loren Eiseley and Joseph Conrad. Just a few suggestions that could add to your arsenal.

[cantthinkofanything]

Don't forget aboutTooter McGee. Very poignant.

[Avante]

Don't forget aboutTooter McGee. Very poignant.


Why not get some warm milk put your jammies on curl up in a corner and watch...



C3hHQvkUhJo (http://C3hHQvkUhJo)

[silverblk mystix]

Well, this thread turned out to be very insightful.

Hey, you came back...:lol

Seriously though, if you'd like to discuss songwriting in here just say so...

Are you familiar with song compostion/structure...or in other words- which formula did you use in your song you posted?

verse/chorus/verse/chorus

or

ABAB

AABA

etc...

If you'd like to talk songwriting let me know. Or anything else, guitar playing, recording,etc...

[DMC]

Wrong again.

The bet was tell me who would fill the 8 lanes in a best of HBCU 100m sprinting, that was not done. It had nothing at all to do with finding any list. The list he did find was wrong.
How do you know it was wrong? It was your list. So you are saying that you're wrong?

You've made yourself an unreliable source by admission of being an unreliable source. You don't even accept your own claims.

[silverblk mystix]

How do you know it was wrong? It was your list. So you are saying that you're wrong?

You've made yourself an unreliable source by admission of being an unreliable source. You don't even accept your own claims.

Hey this is a writers thread- gtfo already.

[The Reckoning]

winning thread right hur

[silverblk mystix]

winning thread right hur

What do you write?

[The Reckoning]

What do you write?


softcore erotica about beasts in heat, but that's mostly it.

[silverblk mystix]

softcore erotica about beasts in heat, but that's mostly it.

...his growing love pump throbbing inside her moist tunnel of love...:lmao

[DMC]

Hey this is a writers thread- gtfo already.
What the fuck are you doing here? It's not a prison guard thread.

I am not afraid to poke the bear. In fact, bend over, I'll poke you right in your asshole.

[silverblk mystix]

What the fuck are you doing here? It's not a prison guard thread.

I am not afraid to poke the bear. In fact, bend over, I'll poke you right in your asshole.

I'll write circles around your uncreative ass.

Get back down to your league, son.

[Insomniac]

Had good intentions but time to write this thread off.

[silverblk mystix]

here's a tip

turn off the internet

and write

10,000 hours should be enough to determine whether you're good at it or not

What are you talking about- there is nothing but "experts" in this place.

[Avante]

What are you talking about- there is nothing but "experts" in this place.

We do have a few.

[DMC]

I'll write circles around your uncreative ass.

Get back down to your league, son.
I've seen your handy work in a thread you created. I wasn't impressed.

If you want to go head to head against me, start a thread and show me what you have, then I will respond.

[silverblk mystix]

I've seen your handy work in a thread you created. I wasn't impressed.

If you want to go head to head against me, start a thread and show me what you have, then I will respond.

Go see and hear my music and study the lyrics. Then you can challenge someone else.

[DMC]

Go see and hear my music and study the lyrics. Then you can challenge someone else.

How do you know I haven't already?

Your lyrics are pedestrian at best. Your music is predictable and uninspiring. On any given Monday night I can find 5 dozen local Applebees musicians who would destroy you.

[silverblk mystix]

How do you know I haven't already?

Your lyrics are pedestrian at best. Your music is predictable and uninspiring. On any given Monday night I can find 5 dozen local Applebees musicians who would destroy you.

Great music review. Thanks!

This is probably why you attack me, because deep inside you know you are outmatched.

:lmao

[DMC]

Great music review. Thanks!

This is probably why you attack me, because deep inside you know you are outmatched.

:lmao

You're that stalker bitch from Two and a Half Men.

http://www.tvequals.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/10/two-half-men-s8e7-crazy-bitch-gazette-06.jpg

You start multi thread and then call responders "attackers".

[Avante]

So we have writers here......hmmm?


It was cold outside, which is nornal for a Montana December, Billy Bob was just finishing up his chores when he heard a gun shot......................


Seperating the boys of the men.

[DMC]

DAY HAD BROKEN cold and gray, exceedingly cold and gray, when the man turned aside from the main Yukon trail and climbed the high earth-bank, where a dim and little-travelled trail led eastward through the fat spruce timberland. It was a steep bank, and he paused for breath at the top, excusing the act to himself by looking at his watch. It was nine o'clock. There was no sun nor hint of sun, though there was not a cloud in the sky. It was a clear day, and yet there seemed an intangible pall over the face of things, a subtle gloom that made the day dark, and that was due to the absence of sun. This fact did not worry the man. He was used to the lack of sun. It had been days since he had seen the sun, and he knew that a few more days must pass before that cheerful orb, due south, would just peep above the sky-line and dip immediately from view.

That's from "To Build a Fire" by Jack London

Start your story like that, not the pedestrian way you always do.

[silverblk mystix]

DAY HAD BROKEN cold and gray, exceedingly cold and gray, when the man turned aside from the main Yukon trail and climbed the high earth-bank, where a dim and little-travelled trail led eastward through the fat spruce timberland. It was a steep bank, and he paused for breath at the top, excusing the act to himself by looking at his watch. It was nine o'clock. There was no sun nor hint of sun, though there was not a cloud in the sky. It was a clear day, and yet there seemed an intangible pall over the face of things, a subtle gloom that made the day dark, and that was due to the absence of sun. This fact did not worry the man. He was used to the lack of sun. It had been days since he had seen the sun, and he knew that a few more days must pass before that cheerful orb, due south, would just peep above the sky-line and dip immediately from view.

That's from "To Build a Fire" by Jack London

Start your story like that, not the pedestrian way you always do.


Oh hell, DMC...for a second I thought that was yours...

Post yours.

What do you write, I will give encouragement if deserving.

Why just criticize others?

[DMC]

Oh hell, DMC...for a second I thought that was yours...

Post yours.

What do you write, I will give encouragement if deserving.

Why just criticize others?
What? You claimed to be well versed in literature, and you thought a classic Jack London opening was mine?

Fucking fraud.

[Avante]

DAY HAD BROKEN cold and gray, exceedingly cold and gray, when the man turned aside from the main Yukon trail and climbed the high earth-bank, where a dim and little-travelled trail led eastward through the fat spruce timberland. It was a steep bank, and he paused for breath at the top, excusing the act to himself by looking at his watch. It was nine o'clock. There was no sun nor hint of sun, though there was not a cloud in the sky. It was a clear day, and yet there seemed an intangible pall over the face of things, a subtle gloom that made the day dark, and that was due to the absence of sun. This fact did not worry the man. He was used to the lack of sun. It had been days since he had seen the sun, and he knew that a few more days must pass before that cheerful orb, due south, would just peep above the sky-line and dip immediately from view.

That's from "To Build a Fire" by Jack London

Start your story like that, not the pedestrian way you always do.

How about adding on to the story? Show off a little, can you do it? I can do it and will work off what you post, show us what you got.

[Avante]

What? You claimed to be well versed in literature, and you thought a classic Jack London opening was mine?

Fucking fraud.

Dude, I could a post a ton of stuff from great books and authors you'd..DUH?..about. Do I need to prove it?

[silverblk mystix]

What? You claimed to be well versed in literature, and you thought a classic Jack London opening was mine?

Fucking fraud.


Where are you getting this info? I write songs.

Why are you making up shit and why don't you post something?

I thought this was a writers thread?

[DMC]

Where are you getting this info? I write songs.

Why are you making up shit and why don't you post something?

I thought this was a writers thread?
I wasn't even responding to you. :lmao

Paranoid :lmao

[DMC]

Dude, I could a post a ton of stuff from great books and authors you'd..DUH?..about. Do I need to prove it?

No. Unlike you I don't make false claims. I've never claimed to be an expert in literature.

You could list the name, probably the story, but couldn't quote it.

You're a worthless thumb drive with just folders and no content.

:lmao

[DMC]

How about adding on to the story? Show off a little, can you do it? I can do it and will work off what you post, show us what you got.
I would never add to a finished work of art like that. What, are you going to draw with crayons over Starry Night?

[Avante]

No. Unlike you I don't make false claims. I've never claimed to be an expert in literature.

You could list the name, probably the story, but couldn't quote it.

You're a worthless thumb drive with just folders and no content.

:lmao

Well I am a literature buff, smart move simpleton.

[Avante]

I would never add to a finished work of art like that. What, are you going to draw with crayons over Starry Night?

Just as I thought you ain't got nothing but a big mouth.

Ok simpleton add on to this..

When I was a little lad I lived more than other lads my age, you see I dwelled in two neatheworlds of my own making, in one world I was a king in the other.....

[DMC]

Well I am a literature buff, smart move simpleton.
Which is why you didn't recognize the opening verse to a classic. :lmao

[DMC]

Just as I thought you ain't got nothing but a big mouth.

Ok simpleton add on to this..

When I was a little lad I lived more than other lads my age, you see I dwelled in two neatheworlds of my own making, in one world I was a king in the other.....

I would add proper punctuation and spelling first, then shit can it all and start over with something that doesn't look like a 4th grade report.

I know you're a troll, but you're not doing very well. If your schtick is to look like an idiot, you're succeeding.

[Clipper Nation]

Just as I thought you ain't got nothing but a big mouth.

Ok simpleton add on to this..

When I was a little lad I lived more than other lads my age, you see I dwelled in two neatheworlds of my own making, in one world I was a king in the other.....

...and a troll in both... The End.

[silverblk mystix]

:sleep

[Avante]

...and a troll in both... The End.

That was for those with some skill (or thought they had skill) you need to stay far far away from it.

Here's one for you...

Spot was a good dog, he liked to run........

[Clipper Nation]

That was for those with some skill (or thought they had skill) you need to stay far far away from it.

Here's one for you...

Spot was a good dog, he liked to run........

....far away from Avante. The End

[DMC]

The Dick and Jane series is riveting. See Spot run. Run Spot, run!

Can't wait for the next installment to see if Spot actually does run.

[Avante]

The Dick and Jane series is riveting. See Spot run. Run Spot, run!

Can't wait for the next installment to see if Spot actually does run.

Well I have some Loren Eiseley right here in my hand...

In the waste fields strong with bared wire where the thistles grew over hidden mine fields there exists a curious freedom. Between the guns.....

Give it a shot slick, show off a little.

[Clipper Nation]

Well I have some Loren Eisley right here in my hand...

In the waste fields strong with bared wire where the thistles grew over hidden mine fields there exists a curious freedom. Between the guns.....

...lurked a troll named Avante who annoyed everyone. The End

[DMC]

Well I have some Loren Eiseley right here in my hand...

In the waste fields strong with bared wire where the thistles grew over hidden mine fields there exists a curious freedom. Between the guns.....

Give it a shot slick, show off a little.
My prose is on this forum for all to see. Have at it, slick.

:lmao

As if I would write for a troll. You're the forum monkey. You dance.

[Avante]

...lurked a troll named Avante who annoyed everyone. The End

Clipper Nation was around five when the first discovered that he was a little different than the other children. His parents perferred, unique. Which he certainly was to say the least. His grandmother loved the boy however and nicknamed him...Freddy. The other kids would laugh at Freddy, make fun of him.......................

[Clipper Nation]

Clipper Nation was around five when the first discovered that he was a little different than the other children. His parents perferred, unique. Which he certainly was to say the least. His grandmother loved the boy however and nicknamed him...Freddy. The other kids would laugh at Freddy, make fun of him.......................

...but at least "Freddy" wasn't Avante. The End

[Avante]

My prose is on this forum for all to see. Have at it, slick.

:lmao

As if I would write for a troll. You're the forum monkey. You dance.

All I see monkey is a big mouth called out to prove something and now doing a great job of backing down and out. If you could write you'd be all up in it showing off. Now you dance fatso

[DMC]

All I see monkey is a big mouth called out to prove something and now doing a great job of backing down and out. If you could write you'd be all up in it showing off. Now you dance fatso

:lmao

[Avante]

...but at least "Freddy" wasn't Avante. The End

You really don't have a creative bone in your body do you simpelton?

[Avante]

:lmao

translation

Damn that Avante, he sees right thru my bullshit, cat knows I ain't got shit. Who is Loren Eiseley anyway?

[silverblk mystix]

My prose is on this forum for all to see. Have at it, slick.

:lmao

As if I would write for a troll. You're the forum monkey. You dance.


Where is it posted?

[Clipper Nation]

I ain't got shit. Who is Loren Eiseley anyway?

:lol Self-proclaimed "literary buff"

[Avante]

:lol Self-proclaimed "literary buff"

What would you like to know?

[Clipper Nation]

What would you like to know?

Why you keep trolling, B... :lol

[Avante]

Why you keep trolling, B... :lol

What isn't trolling?

[Clipper Nation]

What isn't trolling?

Anything not posted by you...

[Avante]

Anything not posted by you...

So if I ask you about what you favorite soft drink is, trolling?


If I talk about thse old HS football days, trolling?

Sure is hot here in central Cali today, troling?

[Clipper Nation]

So if I ask you about what you favorite soft drink is, trolling?


If I talk about thse old HS football days, trolling?

Sure is hot here in central Cali today, troling?

Yes, at this point....

[Avante]

Yes, at this point....

That's what I thought so why worry about it, right?

I confess I'd rather give others something to mess around with than nothing like you and so many others do. You realy don't have to read me you know, so why do you? Does ot really matter if I'm King Troll or not? Is it realy that big a deal? Do you think leeching off everyone else like you dois cool?

[Clipper Nation]

That's what I thought so why worry about it, right?

It's not good trolling, just annoying, tbh...

[DMC]

What would you like to know?
You use Google just like everyone else.

Thumbdrive

[Avante]

You use Google just like everyone else.

Thumbdrive

Right this minute ask me about any school and I'll give you their best fantasy 4x1 team..BOOM!!!!!!!!!!!! Seconds!

We'll time me.

[Clipper Nation]

Right this minute ask me about any school and I'll give you their best fantasy 4x1 team..BOOM!!!!!!!!!!!! Seconds!

G:lol:lolgle

And you'd STILL get it wrong... :lmao

Anyway, you need to realize nobody gives a shit, B....

[Avante]

G:lol:lolgle

And you'd STILL get it wrong... :lmao

Anyway, you need to realize nobody gives a shit, B....

Give it a shot and see what happens. Look you've been following me around all fucking day long. Why? Yep, entertaining. Why not go post on those riveting threads with no trolls, well?

[Clipper Nation]

Give it a shot and see what happens. Look you've been following me around all fucking day long. Why? Yep, entertaining. Why not go post on those riveting threads with no trolls, well?

Or maybe you should stop trolling....

[Avante]

Or maybe you should stop trolling....

Why do you care?

[Clipper Nation]

Why do you care?

Why are you still trolling?

[Avante]

Why are you still trolling?

Why not answer the question? Why am I all you do here? Why do you care what I do? I mean look at you, all you do is follow me around. I mean it's starting to look like stalking. I'm all you do. it's giving me an uneasy feeling. you're starting to looking freaky dude, I'm serious. We all play our silly games here but you really are taking this way too far.

My real name is Larry, I play these internet characters on a couple boards as a lark. Totally designed to get the reaction they do, as you can see I am a master at it. Yep twisted. Now will you please go away, you are giving me the willies.

The best trolls never troll, they set you up and you dive in head first.

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

Well...

Maybe I'll try to start a similar thread sometime soon.
& hopefully, it doesn't end the same way.

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

Well...

Maybe I'll try to start a similar thread sometime soon.
& hopefully, it doesn't end the same way.

[DMC]

Well...

Maybe I'll try to start a similar thread sometime soon.
& hopefully, it doesn't end the same way.

If you need help writing a script, PM me. Don't waste time with these Google chasing faggots.

[silverblk mystix]

Well...

Maybe I'll try to start a similar thread sometime soon.
& hopefully, it doesn't end the same way.


Sorry bro,

I was sincere in my responses and at least have put my work on the line as did you...

Some people came in here and attacked but never provided any sample of their work (which is funny because I appreciate art and when someone submits a sample or shares their music--I am always pretty sincere about my responses)

but if you do want to discuss any music related stuff I will absolutely pitch in.

Good luck.

[silverblk mystix]

If you need help writing a script, PM me. Don't waste time with these Google chasing faggots.


Is this why you are attacking me? Because I wrote a scene of a script for fun here?

Did I mention you?

NO.

I am not a screenplay writer and if it hurt you that much then post your scripts---or even a sample.

Why talk so much shit and never provide a sample?

Bizarre vendetta.

[DMC]

Is this why you are attacking me? Because I wrote a scene of a script for fun here?

Did I mention you?

NO.

I am not a screenplay writer and if it hurt you that much then post your scripts---or even a sample.

Why talk so much shit and never provide a sample?

Bizarre vendetta.
I haven't attacked you. I'm just wasting time on a rainy day goofing off. Had I wanted to attack you, I wouldn't do it online.

Surely you know how the game is played by now.

Besides, if he wants a sample I will send him one in private. That's how I roll.

[silverblk mystix]

I haven't attacked you. I'm just wasting time on a rainy day goofing off. Had I wanted to attack you, I wouldn't do it online.

Surely you know how the game is played by now.

Besides, if he wants a sample I will send him one in private. That's how I roll.


So you put down everyone's work and call everyone's work shitty and claim to be a writer. You post on a writers thread and then at the end of the day you refrain from backing up your claims and/or even trying to provide a sample?

Ok.

Sounds like you defined exactly what you are. Good luck to you and god bless your family.

[Clipper Nation]

Well...

Maybe I'll try to start a similar thread sometime soon.
& hopefully, it doesn't end the same way.

Not bloody likely as long as Avante and sbm are there to make every thread about them.....

[DMC]

So you put down everyone's work and call everyone's work shitty and claim to be a writer. You post on a writers thread and then at the end of the day you refrain from backing up your claims and/or even trying to provide a sample?

Ok.

Sounds like you defined exactly what you are. Good luck to you and god bless your family.
I never claimed to be a writer.

You jump to wild conclusions.

If Roger needs/wants my input, I will give it to him in a PM. I don't have to show you any stinking scripts.

[silverblk mystix]

I never claimed to be a writer.

You jump to wild conclusions.

If Roger needs/wants my input, I will give it to him in a PM. I don't have to show you any stinking scripts.


Do whatever you want-but it doesn't lend any credibility when you put down everyone's work and then are too chicken-shit to back your claims.

I would have probably been one of the few to actually compliment you, ironically.

[DMC]

Do whatever you want-but it doesn't lend any credibility when you put down everyone's work and then are too chicken-shit to back your claims.

I would have probably been one of the few to actually compliment you, ironically.
:cry

[Avante]

Well...

Maybe I'll try to start a similar thread sometime soon.
& hopefully, it doesn't end the same way.

Roger I play around with the kids here because they are funny. Trust me I know a lot about poetry and writing, who you need to read what you need to read. Sorry about how it went, honest. It's obvious you are on a higher wrung of the ladder, glad to see that.

[DMC]

I've written but mostly only about life experiences.

By the way, it's "rung" and by the way you slop your sentences together here, I find it hard to believe you've read much, or that you've written anything legible.

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

Well, I just bought Final Draft 8, it's software for screen-writing. It cost me $250, so I'm pretty diligent on getting started.

I'm just going to go ahead and talk about my premise,
maybe that way we can all go back to talking about writing,
or music or poetry, whatever it may be.

My premise is, a man in his late 30's and his brother in his early 30's. The older brother is an author, who had just got a book published. The book sold very few copies and didn't receive any good reviews. Obviously, he & his family (wife & 13 year old son) are struggling financially, but more than anything (including money), he wants to be immortalized for a great, profound novel.

So he becomes fascinated with the story of Lord Timothy Dexter. An illiterate author from 1748, who published a book devoid of punctuation and correct spelling. Dexter decided to fake his own death to see what people would say or do.

So the older brother, conjures up an idea, that he himself would fake his death, & would only tell one person, the only person he trusts 100%, his younger brother. His younger brother is tasked with knowing his brother is not dead, pretending that he is, and reporting all of the reactions and feelings to his older brother, so that he may write them down, to create a riveting book based on a true story.

Of course, the main character is the younger brother, under-going emotional turmoil, having to witness the pain and despair among his loved ones, & especially growing closer to his older brother's son.

I have a bit more that I want to add to the idea.
but I'm sure you all get the gist (not a spurs reference).

feedback would be appreciated.
also! don't steal my idea! I beg of you. lol.
then again it might be a bad premise to most of you.

[silverblk mystix]

Well, I just bought Final Draft 8, it's software for screen-writing. It cost me $250, so I'm pretty diligent on getting started.

I'm just going to go ahead and talk about my premise,
maybe that way we can all go back to talking about writing,
or music or poetry, whatever it may be.

My premise is, a man in his late 30's and his brother in his early 30's. The older brother is an author, who had just got a book published. The book sold very few copies and didn't receive any good reviews. Obviously, he & his family (wife & 13 year old son) are struggling financially, but more than anything (including money), he wants to be immortalized for a great, profound novel.

So he becomes fascinated with the story of Lord Timothy Dexter. An illiterate author from 1748, who published a book devoid of punctuation and correct spelling. Dexter decided to fake his own death to see what people would say or do.

So the older brother, conjures up an idea, that he himself would fake his death, & would only tell one person, the only person he trusts 100%, his younger brother. His younger brother is tasked with knowing his brother is not dead, pretending that he is, and reporting all of the reactions and feelings to his older brother, so that he may write them down, to create a riveting book based on a true story.

Of course, the main character is the younger brother, under-going emotional turmoil, having to witness the pain and despair among his loved ones, & especially growing closer to his older brother's son.

I have a bit more that I want to add to the idea.
but I'm sure you all get the gist (not a spurs reference).

feedback would be appreciated.
also! don't steal my idea! I beg of you. lol.
then again it might be a bad premise to most of you.



I am at work- but I will give it some thought and post something after work where I can sit and take my time and think.

Don't worry about getting ripped off until you actually have a complete story---or even if someone tries to rip it off--they would still have to do the real work of marketing it and selling it.

You would be lucky if someone stole it and made millions-because then you would have something to sue for $$$

Once you have an actual story/script- you would first get it copyrighted anyway.

[DMC]

I found the story of Dexter to be hilarious. It would be quite an undertaking to pull it off though, since you would have to spend some time developing the characters to the point where the audience sympathizes with them. They would need to spend time together, and the audience would need to be able to see the bond between the brothers in order to understand the antagonistic dilemma that the younger brother faces. I assume, of course, that the younger brother is the protagonist.

[Clipper Nation]

Very cool idea, man.... kind of reminds me of a cross between Synechdoche, New York and The Royal Tenenbaums...

[silverblk mystix]

Well, I just bought Final Draft 8, it's software for screen-writing. It cost me $250, so I'm pretty diligent on getting started.

I'm just going to go ahead and talk about my premise,
maybe that way we can all go back to talking about writing,
or music or poetry, whatever it may be.

My premise is, a man in his late 30's and his brother in his early 30's. The older brother is an author, who had just got a book published. The book sold very few copies and didn't receive any good reviews. Obviously, he & his family (wife & 13 year old son) are struggling financially, but more than anything (including money), he wants to be immortalized for a great, profound novel.

So he becomes fascinated with the story of Lord Timothy Dexter. An illiterate author from 1748, who published a book devoid of punctuation and correct spelling. Dexter decided to fake his own death to see what people would say or do.

So the older brother, conjures up an idea, that he himself would fake his death, & would only tell one person, the only person he trusts 100%, his younger brother. His younger brother is tasked with knowing his brother is not dead, pretending that he is, and reporting all of the reactions and feelings to his older brother, so that he may write them down, to create a riveting book based on a true story.

Of course, the main character is the younger brother, under-going emotional turmoil, having to witness the pain and despair among his loved ones, & especially growing closer to his older brother's son.

I have a bit more that I want to add to the idea.
but I'm sure you all get the gist (not a spurs reference).

feedback would be appreciated.
also! don't steal my idea! I beg of you. lol.
then again it might be a bad premise to most of you.

Are you planning on the audience being aware of this plot...or is the audience in on this secret. Something to consider. Probably more powerful if the audience also thinks the writer died...maybe discovering the ruse at the end...

[Roger Freemason Jr.]

Clipper Nation, thank you for your kind words. It took me a long time to come up with something that I feel will be my first, real, legitimate screenplay. By the way, I love The Royal Tenenbaums.

DMC, you're right, the younger brother is definitely the protagonist, & the older is the antagonist, but you know, he's going to have plenty of layers, along with the young one. & Thank you for reminding me, that first I need to solidify the closeness of the brothers, before the plot thickens. I'm going to have to spend a lot of time developing these characters, even the other family members, the older brother's wife and son (who is 13, old enough to where I have to create a unique personality for him). Their mother, & sister, friends of the younger brother, a love interest (can't leave it out). I value your advice, it's been great so far.

& mystix, I was planning on the audience being aware of the secret, because if it's kept a secret, there is no antagonist in the older brother, there is only a twist at the end. But I know what you mean, add a little shock value, I have a couple little bombshells I've been thinking about for the script. Like, since the younger brother is spending so much time with his nephew, his older brother's wife notices and it makes her feel good, so she comes on to him pretty strong. His younger brother would then have to tell his older brother, breaking his heart, and the older brother would still have to write it in his book.


Guys, when you think about these characters..
What actors do you think of playing these roles? Lol.