Somthin' - a poem - by SpursforSix

[SpursforSix]

I normally don't share my softer side with the board but I wrote this poem today and thought it was uplifitng

Somethin'

Somethin' somethin'
In my pocket
Somethin' somethin'
Not a rocket
Somethin' somethin'
Just say "fok it"
I got me a sack of Takis

[Blake]

^ nice rhythm. Good flow.

You're the st poetry expert in my book

[chunticakes]

Beautiful piece tbh.

I was feeling down today but now I feel better. Thanks!

[SpursforSix]

Second verse (a little more abstract)

Somethin' somethin'
In my pocket
Somethin' somethin'
Tyler Locket
Somethin' somethin'
Davy Crocket
I present to you a box of chocolates

[DMC]

Second verse (a little more abstract)

Somethin' somethin'
In my pocket
Somethin' somethin'
Tyler Locket
Somethin' somethin'
Davy Crocket
I present to you a box of chocolates

I liked you better before you sold out on that second verse. You were more "real" to me when you were putting out organic material like in the OP.

[Avante]

This is really sad, the boy can't do poetry either.

SFS, stick to talking movies and TV shows, you're good at that, ok? Stay away from them blues, track and poetry, yep...ya suck.

Take notes slugger.

"Somthin' "

Somthin' in the mornin'
Somthin' late at night
as long as my baby
is given me Somthin'
everything will be alright

Stold this from Red Foxx

Soldier writes home to his wife, honey baby, if I don't get home pretty soon, I might have to start buying somthin'

Wife writes back

Honey baby, if you don't start sending some money home pretty soon, I might have to start selling somthin'

Ha~~~

[Avante]

SFS, you're in a trailer park out in west Texas, your old bulldog just died and your woman ran off with your brother. Let's have a poem, ok?

It just hit me, now watch the boy run from this.....also.

Give Avante a ficticous scenario/situation and watch the magic. After SFS does something.

[DMC]

Fictitious scenario:

Avante is athletic and really well versed in track and field. He knows music very well.

Now make a poem about you shutting the fuck up

[Avante]

Fictitious scenario:

Avante is athletic and really well versed in track and field. He knows music very well.

Now make a poem about you shutting the fuck up

"Avante"

he just wouldn't shut up
both night and day
it was just yakyakyak
and he wouldn't go away

he bugged everyone
was a pain in the ass
and if I had a gun
he'd breath his last

he thinks he knows it all
brag brag brag
when in reality
he's a know nothing fag

Avante do us all a favor
blow yourself away
no more yakyakyak
from an idiot like you
oh what a glorious day

See I do things, no running away, no shuckin' and jivin' no tap dancing, no excuses. I jump right in and get it done.

[Blake]

That's horrible.

You should ask sfs for advice

[SpursforSix]

I liked you better before you sold out on that second verse. You were more "real" to me when you were putting out organic material like in the OP.

Thats legitimate. The first verse just came to me. Then the final line of the second verse came to me. But I forced Locket and Crocket.

You hit the nail on the head.

[Avante]

SFS planted the seed.

We need a Poem Competition right here. We are given a fictious situation and have to poem it, yep, everyone can play.

Example

Poster....a cute girl waiting on a train.

"The Wait"

she stood there waitin'
with the rain pourin' down
she was waitin for her man
he was on that old southbound

[Avante]

"Clipper Nation"

what can we say
about this boy
he's never happy
never shows any joy

it's a constant wimper
then a little whine
everything is negative
all the time

never says a good thing
doubt he ever has
it's alway bah humbug
and everyone is a fag

[Blake]

^^ https://www.dreadcentral.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/01/rt-splat.jpg

[SpursforSix]

"Clipper Nation"

what can we say
about this boy
he's never happy
never shows any joy

it's a constant wimper
then a little whine
everything is negative
all the time

never says a good thing
doubt he ever has
it's alway bah humbug
and everyone is a fag

You have no sense of meter. I find it really hard to believe you were as good a dancer as you think you were.

[Avante]

You have no sense of meter. I find it really hard to believe you were as good a dancer as you think you were.

Stop it guy, ok? It's looking really stupid now, alright? I've had my poems read to more than one class while at COS, had a couple published in a paper.

Won at least a dozen dance contests, have done the movie thing where it's just the two of us out there while everyone watched......a few times. Ran up and down the west coast for 10 years before meeting Judy.

This...every single thing you say or do MUST suck...is really getting stupid now, ok coward?

Pick a fictious situation little guy and let's poem up,ok?

Little man, this was suppose to be stupid, right?

Somethin' somethin'
In my pocket
Somethin' somethin'
Not a rocket
Somethin' somethin'
Just say "fok it"
I got me a sack of Takis

[BD24]

Wow didn't know SFS was such a gifited poet. Not sure why I am surprised though, it appears there is nothing this man can't do. The board is truly blessed to have him here.

[Avante]

Wow didn't know SFS was such a gifited poet. Not sure why I am surprised though, it appears there is nothing this man can't do. The board is truly blessed to have him here.

Dude, he can't talk track, he can't talk them blues, his poetry sucks, yep...real life.

Go ahead ask him to talk track or them blues. he can't. The poetry, hahahaha~~~

[Blake]

Dude, he can't talk track, he can't talk them blues, his poetry sucks, yep...real life.

Go ahead ask him to talk track or them blues. he can't. The poetry, hahahaha~~~

So jealous

[DMC]

"Avante"

he just wouldn't shut up
both night and day
it was just yakyakyak
and he wouldn't go away

he bugged everyone
was a pain in the ass
and if I had a gun
he'd breath his last

he thinks he knows it all
brag brag brag
when in reality
he's a know nothing fag

Avante do us all a favor
blow yourself away
no more yakyakyak
from an idiot like you
oh what a glorious day

See I do things, no running away, no shuckin' and jivin' no tap dancing, no excuses. I jump right in and get it done.

You really struggle with syllables and pentameter.

[Avante]

You really struggle with syllables and pentameter.

No I don't guy, been having my poems praised since I was a little kid.

Wrote a poem about falling for a creative writing class, teacher read it to the class, only poem she read. Then I had a english class that called for a poem, so I submitted that same poem, yep.....read to the class.

Not going to work little man, I know I'm good.

Give SFS a fictious situation and watch the mess, come on do it.

[Chucho]

He's not only the UNDISPUTED ST Expert on Track and Blues, but he's also the poet laureate of this place.

Is there nothing SFS doesn't do expertly?

[Avante]

He's not only the UNDISPUTED ST Expert on Track and Blues, but he's also the poet laureate of this place.

Is there nothing SFS doesn't do expertly?


This is good?

Somethin'

Somethin' somethin'
In my pocket
Somethin' somethin'
Not a rocket
Somethin' somethin'
Just say "fok it"
I got me a sack of Takis


Wow, do we have some know nothings here or what?

[Avante]

It would kinda work if it was just a tad bit realistic, ok?

It loses something when it's...

Avante is fat, has zits, bad breath, no teeth, ugly, stupid, bad skin, he stinks, bow legged, knocked kneed, pot belly, dinky dick, moron.

Ha~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

The fun I have on these boards is watching how people just can't handle anyone who knows stuff and brags about it, they come totally unglued and it's funny watching how they act.

OBVIOUSLY....SFS don't know shit, nobody is blind here we all see it. OBVIOUSLY....the guy has no talent at all with poetry, we all see it, but........look at what must be played, hahahahaha~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

If anyone here had any confidence in the boy at all they'd love to see him kick my ass in track trivia, why is it nobody is setting this butt kicking up,yep.......they know SFS don't know shit. All this...the fake contest was already done,you lost....is just saying....no way we let you beat him up in a real contest.

[Avante]

SFS poem this...

It's pushin' midnight, a lone sailor is on lookout, he sees the lights of Hong Kong harbor, take it.

[pgardn]

S46
Moving.

AVante

I use his poems as a laxative.

Avante, do your bowels ache when you drool?

[monosylab1k]

I normally don't share my softer side with the board but I wrote this poem today and thought it was uplifitng

Somethin'

Somethin' somethin'
In my pocket
Somethin' somethin'
Not a rocket
Somethin' somethin'
Just say "fok it"
I got me a sack of Takis

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[Avante]

I would never act retarded just to troll (thinking I'm trolling when actually being trolled)

SFS can't do poetry, it's stupid shit. We all see it so why act dumb?

[DMC]

No I don't guy, been having my poems praised since I was a little kid.

Wrote a poem about falling for a creative writing class, teacher read it to the class, only poem she read. Then I had a english class that called for a poem, so I submitted that same poem, yep.....read to the class.

Not going to work little man, I know I'm good.

Give SFS a fictious situation and watch the mess, come on do it.

COMMON BEGINNERS' MISTAKES

1. Not pruning a poem.Extraneous comments at the beginning (before the poem really starts) at the end or in the middle.
2. Vague subjects. Poems about 'beauty', 'despair' etc rarely come off.
3. Stumbling rhythms and poor sound . Read your poems aloud, and listen to them.
4.Words or phrases from the wrong register - slang in a straightpoem,complicated words in a simple poem, afterthoughts and additionsnot in the same language flow.
5. Hackneyed subjects; slight subjects.
6.Stating the obvious, especially in the interpretation of yourobservations.Let your descriptions speak for themselves. Many goodsimiles and metaphors speak for themselves, too.
7. Prosiness, including lack of musicality or feeling.
8. Form * sonnet, villanelle, triolet, sestina etc * should seem to fit the poem like a dress must suit the wearer.
9.Predictable rhyme. Rhyme has many good uses. Don't misuse it. A usefultrick is to put the more common word of a rhyming pair first. Also totreat rhyme as wit, and make sure it is witty.

[Avante]

COMMON BEGINNERS' MISTAKES

1. Not pruning a poem.Extraneous comments at the beginning (before the poem really starts) at the end or in the middle.
2. Vague subjects. Poems about 'beauty', 'despair' etc rarely come off.
3. Stumbling rhythms and poor sound . Read your poems aloud, and listen to them.
4.Words or phrases from the wrong register - slang in a straightpoem,complicated words in a simple poem, afterthoughts and additionsnot in the same language flow.
5. Hackneyed subjects; slight subjects.
6.Stating the obvious, especially in the interpretation of yourobservations.Let your descriptions speak for themselves. Many goodsimiles and metaphors speak for themselves, too.
7. Prosiness, including lack of musicality or feeling.
8. Form * sonnet, villanelle, triolet, sestina etc * should seem to fit the poem like a dress must suit the wearer.
9.Predictable rhyme. Rhyme has many good uses. Don't misuse it. A usefultrick is to put the more common word of a rhyming pair first. Also totreat rhyme as wit, and make sure it is witty.

Little man, did ya miss.....since I was a little kid? I've wrote 10,000 poems at least, a beginner....hahahahaha~~~~~~~~~


You write a poem guy, show us how it's done, ok?

[DMC]

He's not only the UNDISPUTED ST Expert on Track and Blues, but he's also the poet laureate of this place.

Is there nothing SFS doesn't do expertly?

This is why he's no good at anything, really. When you think you're great, you have no reason to get better. You just walk into a bar in Olongapo and take the first child you see.

[DMC]

That Day in Olongapo (as told by victim)

Of all the hardships
that Ive endured
I'n this 40 years of mine
One awful moment
trumps them all
frozen there in time

The day that sailor
walked into that bar
and asked me for a light
Little did I know he'd try
to follow me home that night

A burly man that smelled of sweat
a stench I can't forget
And as he lurched and fell on me
and crushed my cigarettes

But then he stopped and blurted out
"you should see me draw"
And from his crotch he pulled a pen
And scribbled on the wall

I didn't even glance at it
My eyes were already fixed
On the lump of sagging lard
that dwarfed his tiny dick

We never even had sex that night
He couldn't come to bat
He couldn't even reach the thing
Beneath that fucking fat

So as he snored a short time later
I rolled from beneath hsi arm
And left for him a letter
That spoke of all his charm

He still thinks, even now
That he gave it to me good
And that I was twelve years old girl
and that he laid the wood

But I'm actually a grown man now
My life has been much funner
The only thing that's left from then
Is this list of shitty runners


I did this in the spur of the moment. It's better than anything Avante ever did, even the ones he has stuck to his refrigerator.

[Avante]

That Day in Olongapo (as told by victim)

Of all the hardships
that Ive endured
I'n this 40 years of mine
One awful moment
trumps them all
frozen there in time

The day that sailor
walked into that bar
and asked me for a light
Little did I know he'd try
to follow me home that night

A burly man that smelled of sweat
a stench I can't forget
And as he lurched and fell on me
and crushed my cigarettes

But then he stopped and blurted out
"you should see me draw"
And from his crotch he pulled a pen
And scribbled on the wall

I didn't even glance at it
My eyes were already fixed
On the lump of sagging lard
that dwarfed his tiny dick

We never even had sex that night
He couldn't come to bat
He couldn't even reach the thing
Beneath that fucking fat

So as he snored a short time later
I rolled from beneath hsi arm
And left for him a letter
That spoke of all his charm

He still thinks, even now
That he gave it to me good
And that I was twelve years old girl
and that he laid the wood

But I'm actually a grown man now
My life has been much funner
The only thing that's left from then
Is this list of shitty runners


I did this in the spur of the moment. It's better than anything Avante ever did, even the ones he has stuck to his refrigerator.


Little man, work with me, ok?

Those bars made their $$$$$$$ selling liguor, ok, ya with me? The drinking age.....18.....got it slugger....18...ok? Now think just a little bit you can do this. Why would bars have kids in there who couldn't hustle drinks? Well? If you think 12/13 kids sat around in bars doing nothing, you really are stupid.

And, forget poetry guy, that was bad, ok?

Little man, at no time did I ever see anyone I thought was too young to be in a bar, ok? So stop acting like a fucking retard, ok? If I'd seen some kid I'm asking the manager why kids are in his bar.....got it? Ya don't go to bars to be pestered with dumbass little kids, ok?

[DMC]

N0yuV0XEz98

[Avante]

Little people.....


I was in Olongapo in 69,70 and 71, back then the thing was selling kids on the streets, not in the bars, ok? Little dude...."I got young girl, come cheap, you ok" ....which got a..."beat it midget". Anyone thinking little kids were sitting on bar stools......hahahahaha!!!!!!!!! Had to be 18 to drink, little kids in there not drinking would just be in the way, so all this stupid shit about young girls in bars I never saw. Sure, some of those....I 18...were 16 and lying, but when you're only 19-20 yourself.....no worries. Those bars were full of full grown women, who had a ton of experience, so stop acting totally ignorant. ok midgets?

[Avante]

N0yuV0XEz98

Dude, are you really as stupid as ya act?

[Avante]

"Olongapo'

I was sitting on a bar stool
in Olongapo City
thinking about
my home back in Philly

when she came over
and set right down
told me her name was Joannie
and how long would the ship
be in town

I told I was Avante
and really didn't know
how long we'd be
in Olongapo

I bought her a drink
make it a few
it's what she was there for
what these girls do

we danced
all night long
until the bar closed
and everyone was gone


we ended up
out on the beach
talking about her family
and my home
so far out of reach

[SpursforSix]

I'm A by cantthinkofanything (circa 2012)

I'm the gerbil in your ass with the Freddy Kruger claws
I'm a trigger happy ni##er that never takes a pause
I'm a hot load that you just can't take
I'm a bloody loose stool on your birthday cake
I'm a twoouncekidneystone that you'll never pass
I'm the corn in your poop from the cob in your ass
I'm Gary Fucking Neal on the vomit train
I'm MattBonner talent with Lloyd Daniels brains
I'm a Jewish Nazi that's beyond belief
I'm a wine connoisseur with rodent teeth
I'm a circus ballerina. I'm a foppish dancer
I'm a double amputee with testicular cancer
I'm a dirty diaper and panty hose
I'm a foot model with hammer toes
I'm a green submarine with opposable thumbs
I'm Alex Van Halen on electric drums
I'm the black lover in a mixed up tryst
I'm Kid Dynamite with lubricated fists

[Avante]

I'm A by cantthinkofanything (circa 2012)

I'm the gerbil in your ass with the Freddy Kruger claws
I'm a trigger happy ni##er that never takes a pause
I'm a hot load that you just can't take
I'm a bloody loose stool on your birthday cake
I'm a twoouncekidneystone that you'll never pass
I'm the corn in your poop from the cob in your ass
I'm Gary Fucking Neal on the vomit train
I'm MattBonner talent with Lloyd Daniels brains
I'm a Jewish Nazi that's beyond belief
I'm a wine connoisseur with rodent teeth
I'm a circus ballerina. I'm a foppish dancer
I'm a double amputee with testicular cancer
I'm a dirty diaper and panty hose
I'm a foot model with hammer toes
I'm a green submarine with opposable thumbs
I'm Alex Van Halen on electric drums
I'm the black lover in a mixed up tryst
I'm Kid Dynamite with lubricated fists


Stick to the silly and the stupid, it's you.

Classic Hart Crane

THE HIVE

Up the chasm walls of my bleeding heart
Humanity pecks, claws, sobs and climbs
Up the inside, and over every part
Of the hive of the world that is my heart

Half of it anyway.

[Avante]

"Ghost"

it was pushin' midnight
out here on the west coast
when I saw something
looked like a ghost

I wasn't afraid
just curious that's all
when this thing
begin to crawl up the wall

I was cool with that
I had my Louisville Slugger
baseball bat

I watched this thing
slither all around
first on the ceiling
then down on the ground

not sure what it was
or who might fit
all I know
is it look like shit

it finally
crawled out the door
and down the street
that's when I called it a night
and went back to sleep

[Avante]

Speaking of Davey Crockett.


I saw Fess Parker as Davey in that Disney version back in the 50's, I was just a kid and didn't know this was a true story. I thought it was just a show, fiction.

There was Davey vs Redstick the indian. The following week Davey vs Mike....ah...forget and I'm thinking his days in poltics. The last week..The Alamo.

So I keep thinking somehow Davey gets out of this, yep.....a happy ending. So when the Mexican army storms the walls and it's just Davey.......what???? If ya remember all we see is the shadow of Davey swinging Ole Betsy as the Mexican Army overwelms him, yep.........I cried. So that Halloween I paid homage to Davey by dressing up in buckskin with my bb gun as Ole Betsy and a coonskin cap.

Ended up in the Times Delta newspaper, a picture of me/Davey.....trick or treat.

[DD]

SFS poem this...

It's pushin' midnight, a lone sailor is on lookout, he sees the lights of Hong Kong harbor, take it.

Lights in the distance
Of an Asian shore
I set sail in an instant
For some underage whores

[DMC]

"Olongapo'

I was sitting on a bar stool
in Olongapo City
thinking about
my home back in Philly

when she came over
and set right down
told me her name was Joannie
and how long would the ship
be in town

I told I was Avante
and really didn't know
how long we'd be
in Olongapo

I bought her a drink
make it a few
it's what she was there for
what these girls do

we danced
all night long
until the bar closed
and everyone was gone


we ended up
out on the beach
talking about her family
and my home
so far out of reach

She was only twelve
I was twenty two
When you're desperate
Anything will do

She said "please stop"
I just kept going
How long would I last
She had no way of knowing

Twenty seconds later
I'm jizzing on her face
Instead of into her bald cooch
but it's legal in this place

Now I am an old man
living in my garage
fantasizing about my life
my past is a mirage

Shout outs to Skanky britches Jackson and Mike "Full Nelson" Davidson

[SpursforSix]

That Day in Olongapo (as told by victim)

Of all the hardships
that Ive endured
I'n this 40 years of mine
One awful moment
trumps them all
frozen there in time

The day that sailor
walked into that bar
and asked me for a light
Little did I know he'd try
to follow me home that night

A burly man that smelled of sweat
a stench I can't forget
And as he lurched and fell on me
and crushed my cigarettes

But then he stopped and blurted out
"you should see me draw"
And from his crotch he pulled a pen
And scribbled on the wall

I didn't even glance at it
My eyes were already fixed
On the lump of sagging lard
that dwarfed his tiny dick

We never even had sex that night
He couldn't come to bat
He couldn't even reach the thing
Beneath that fucking fat

So as he snored a short time later
I rolled from beneath hsi arm
And left for him a letter
That spoke of all his charm

He still thinks, even now
That he gave it to me good
And that I was twelve years old girl
and that he laid the wood

But I'm actually a grown man now
My life has been much funner
The only thing that's left from then
Is this list of shitty runners


I did this in the spur of the moment. It's better than anything Avante ever did, even the ones he has stuck to his refrigerator.

I think I'll have to defer to DMC as the poetry expert.

[SpursforSix]

Lights in the distance
Of an Asian shore
I set sail in an instant
For some underage whores

Although DD definitely shows potential with this offering.

[rjv]

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[Avante]

Just like with them blues and track, nobody here knows anything.

I can only do so much.

[Avante]

Lights in the distance
Of an Asian shore
I set sail in an instant
For some underage whores

The mistake everyone keeps making is this...

They get married at 14 over there, cool this stupid...underage...bullshit.

[Avante]

Work with me here midgets.

You are all alone in a foxhole somewhere in Germany during the war, peeking out ya see you are surrounded and the bad guys are moving in, poem it.


Get off the cartoon bullshit, can any of you? Cool....I'm an idiot..ok?

Prediction...somebody will now take my....I'm an idiot...and play it as if I said that about myself, so predictable and....simple.

[Avante]

When I got into H.P.Lovecraft I had to get into Edgar Allan Poe also. I had no idea Poe was the poet he was. His The Raven a masterpierce.

I like Harold Monro, love this....

Solitude

When you have tidied all things for the night
And while your thoughts are fading to their sleep
You'll pause a moment in the late firelight
Too sorrowful to weep

Then it goes on.

Highly recommend.....The Great Poems....a Concise book by Louis Untermeyer (complled the poems) 1942

[Chucho]

Shut up, Avante. You're fat and no one likes you.

[Chucho]

And your wife is fat, too. Really, really fat.

[Avante]

Shut up, Avante. You're fat and no one likes you.

Who in the hell likes anyone who constantly reminds them they don't know anything, well? I'm cool with that I actually prefer it that way, far more fun being a heel than a babyface.

Dude, work with me here son......you're fat....is the best ya got, really? Junior high school amigo, really. Dude, elevate your game, ok son?

[Avante]

And your wife is fat, too. Really, really fat.

We talked about that last night.

Avante....why not start crazing in the back yard, ya look like a cow.
Judy..moo moo
Avante...what, 330?
Judy...don't get silly...325
Avante...tits hanging down to your belly button, yuck.
Judy....ya can only ask so much of a bra.
Avante...how many chins do you have?
Judy...let's count them, there's one....two...three
Avante...remember when you were at 110 pounds? Yummy.
Judy...here have a leg, it's 110 pounds.
Avante....thank God ya give amazing head.
Judy....fat people try harder

[SpursforSix]

Who in the hell likes anyone who constantly reminds them they don't know anything, well?

That's rich. And yet you want to write a poem about being in a foxhole surrounded by Nazis. Which you know zero about.
That's insulting to the guys that actually in that position.

[Avante]

That's rich. And yet you want to write a poem about being in a foxhole surrounded by Nazis. Which you know zero about.
That's insulting to the guys that actually in that position.

How many war movies have there been, well? Not one of those directers or actors was ever in a foxhole surrounded by Nazi's..........right? I seriously doubt Burt Lancaster and Kirk Douglas actually fought at the OK Corrall or Japan ever thad a giant lizard stomp around in it.....ok?

Dude, you never ran a 19.5-20.5 so why talk about it? Those who actually have.....................

Little man, are you ever going to actually do anything? It's always ALWAYS some bullshit, why?

"Foxhole"

If there is a God
In Heaven above
How's about a helping hand
Show some love

It's not looking good
Actually think I'm fucked

Take over little guy, ok?

[Avante]

I learned something today.....

Judy was taking a shower and I was making my instant coffee, if ya turn the water on in the kitchen it effects the water in the shower, I know...huh? Not wanting that which will get a....HEY!!!!!!!!! I used some pink Vitamin water in the coffee...........YUCK~~~~~~~

[Blake]

We talked about that last night.

Avante....why not start crazing in the back yard, ya look like a cow.
Judy..moo moo
Avante...what, 330?
Judy...don't get silly...325
Avante...tits hanging down to your belly button, yuck.
Judy....ya can only ask so much of a bra.
Avante...how many chins do you have?
Judy...let's count them, there's one....two...three
Avante...remember when you were at 110 pounds? Yummy.
Judy...here have a leg, it's 110 pounds.
Avante....thank God ya give amazing head.
Judy....fat people try harder

Meter is still off but now you're on to something

[Avante]

SFS, poem this.

David is looking across the valley when he gets his first look at Goliath.

[SpursforSix]

How many war movies have there been, well? Not one of those directers or actors was ever in a foxhole surrounded by Nazi's..........right?

Do you know how dumb you really are? You don't think they either based these movies off of a true life account or book/screenplay written by someone with experience?

You think Tom Hanks just put together Band of Brothers based on some ideas he had in his head?
Know why Platoon was so poignant? Oliver Stone was a grunt in Nam.
Full Metal Jacket was based on the accounts of a Marine Vet.

You being a blues "expert" should understand why dem old early blues songs were more meaningful than something put out by a copycat today.
I'm sure you would agree that the lives those early blues men lived played a large part in effectiveness of the songs.

[SpursforSix]

SFS, poem this.

David is looking across the valley when he gets his first look at Goliath.

Who's that tall guy over there?
Six foot nine with golden hair.
He looks like a scarey dude
Wonder what he looks like nude
He's so angry, what a cock
Think I'll kill him with this rock

[Avante]

Do you know how dumb you really are? You don't think they either based these movies off of a true life account or book/screenplay written by someone with experience?

You think Tom Hanks just put together Band of Brothers based on some ideas he had in his head?
Know why Platoon was so poignant? Oliver Stone was a grunt in Nam.
Full Metal Jacket was based on the accounts of a Marine Vet.

You being a blues "expert" should understand why dem old early blues songs were more meaningful than something put out by a copycat today.
I'm sure you would agree that the lives those early blues men lived played a large part in effectiveness of the songs.

Dumb is totally missing my point. POINT....YOU...don't have to really be the one experiencing things to know about it.....got it?

OBVIOUSLY....the allure if them old blues is that authenticity, When those cats sang about don't let the sun set on me, you understood how real that really was. Some cat today singing those lyrics means nothing.

[Avante]

Who's that tall guy over there?
Six foot nine with golden hair.
He looks like a scarey dude
Wonder what he looks like nude
He's so angry, what a cock
Think I'll kill him with this rock

Are you capable of rising above....see me everyone, I funny huh? Ya can't can ya?

Dude, Goliath was only 6-9, hahahahaha~~~~~~~~~

I can see you're once again stuck on stupid so fuck this.

[DMC]

SFS, poem this.

David is looking across the valley when he gets his first look at Goliath.

Holy fuck
I'm just kidding
Remember Lord
I did your bidding
Fuck he's big
I did it again
Please forgive me
For that sin
I could take him
To the balls
I can't stop sinning
Fuck it all

[pgardn]

Holy fuck
I'm just kidding
Remember Lord
I did your bidding
Fuck he's big
I did it again
Please forgive me
For that sin
I could take him
To the balls
I can't stop sinning
Fuck it all

You just hit the utter solitary angst of despair that is so hard to capture.
I pity Avante.
The living hell of it all.
Taking people down with him, yet all alone in the evil isolation he can’t handle.

The Devil has no lasting friendships with black people who don’t read.

[pgardn]

Dumb is totally missing my point. POINT....YOU...don't have to really be the one experiencing things to know about it.....got it?

OBVIOUSLY....the allure if them old blues is that authenticity, When those cats sang about don't let the sun set on me, you understood how real that really was. Some cat today singing those lyrics means nothing.

Your time is always the best of times.
Yet the worst of times for the innocent you preyed upon.

[Avante]

Holy fuck
I'm just kidding
Remember Lord
I did your bidding
Fuck he's big
I did it again
Please forgive me
For that sin
I could take him
To the balls
I can't stop sinning
Fuck it all

"David"

My God
Up in Heaven
Help me if You can
As You can see
That is one big man

Give me a sign
Dear God
Show me the way
All I have is a little slingshot
To save the day

I see it now
The perfect rock
The perfect fit
Now all I need
Is the perfect hit

There he stands
Looking like a tree
I think he's smiling
Down on me

I need You God
Now would be nice
I only get one shot
Can't asked You twice

Now that it's over
My shot was true
I have to thank You God
I couldn't have done this
Without You

[Avante]

Your time is always the best of times.
Yet the worst of times for the innocent you preyed upon.

Work with me here shorty, ok?

Do you have any idea at all what that world was like, ya don't do ya?

You ran in packs, you couldn't even leave the ship unless three of you went as a gang. Yep, protection.

Ok, ya walk into a bar now think of a bee to honey, here they come running over....buy me drink, buy me drink. Dude, if ya refused guess what, yep, you pissed everyone off. These ladies made thier living off us ya dumb fuck, ok? There were no....innocent preyed upon....ok stupid?

Little people, cool the stupidity, ok? First off...underage??? Hahahahahha~~~~~~~ Who can tell me the legal age of consent over there in 1969, well?

[pgardn]

Work with me here shorty, ok?

Do you have any idea at all what that world was like, ya don't do ya?

You ran in packs, you couldn't even leave the ship unless three of you went as a gang. Yep, protection.

Ok, ya walk into a bar and just think of a be to honey, herethey come running over....buy me drink, buy me drink. Dude, if ya refusedgues what, yep, you poiised everyone off. These ladies made thie living offf us ya dumb fuck, ok? There were no....innocent preyed upon....ok stupid?

Self loathing becomes rationalization.
Stepping into the realm of the evil of knowing with willful denial.
The torturous path is the only one considered now.

[Avante]

Self loathing becomes rationalization.
Stepping into the realm of the evil of knowing with willful denial.
The torturous path is the only one considered now.

Dude, so you would have stayed on board the ship as all your buddies went over and had good times, right? Dude, sooner or later everyone will start....."this freak a fag?".....trust me.

[BD24]

DMC and SFS both taking wet hot shits on old Pedo.

Jesus Christ, the fat fuck is gonna need his son to spray him and judy down in the back yard tonight

[Avante]

DMC and SFS both taking wet hot shits on old Pedo.

Jesus Christ, the fat fuck is gonna need his son to spray him and judy down in the back yard tonight

Dude, it's getting really stupid now, ok little man? Give us a fictious situation to poem, watch what happens.

[BD24]

Dude, it's getting really stupid now, ok little man? Give us a fictious situation to poem, watch what happens.
Sure, I'll play.

Mason spraying down Avante and Judy in the backyard because they have shit all over them.

Go

[Avante]

Sure, I'll play.

Mason spraying down Avante and Judy in the backyard because they have shit all over them.

Go

So ya lack creativity, right? All you are capable of is stupid bullshit, right? Dude, I see you as one dumb mutherfucker and ya never do anything to change that, got it bitch?

[Avante]

Can anyone here actually do anything, all I see are know nothing clowns.

Somebody finish this for me.

"Hard Road"

I woke up
in the bed
of my old
pickup truck
no clue
where I was
and didn't give
a fuck

elevate your game midgets, ok?

[SpursforSix]

Sure, I'll play.

Mason spraying down Avante and Judy in the backyard because they have shit all over them.

Go

lol

[SpursforSix]

So ya lack creativity, right? All you are capable of is stupid bullshit, right? Dude, I see you as one dumb mutherfucker and ya never do anything to change that, got it bitch?

He gave you a scenario to write about.

[Avante]

I guess I'm going to have to start watching TV, that's about all most of you can talk. Where is the depth?

[Avante]

He gave you a scenario to write about.

Dude, that was on that.....as a little kid I ran a 19.5-20.5.............level, ok?

Right now, I'm watching a track meet from Oslo, guess what won the WORLD CLASS 200m...19.90.

Dude, trolling is one thing, looking like a total idiot is something else, ok?

[DMC]

As a child I ran like the wind
End to end
and back again
sweat and shimmer on my skin

Six foot four, I'm no shorty
four second forties
banging sororities
arrest me hell, I'm the authority

Me and Judy side by side
enjoyed the ride
Took the bride
Got on a forum and I lied

I chose the username Razon
rhymes with Mason
He's amazin'
He popped from Judy while she was grazin'

I told the boys about Olongapo
another low
didn't know
I'd be forum branded a pedo

The truth is I was unathletic
more pathetic
it's copacetic
I prefer instead to wax poetic

Folks here now just see a fool
a forum tool
spew my drool
I basically peaked in high school

[Avante]

As a child I ran like the wind
End to end
and back again
sweat and shimmer on my skin

Six foot four, I'm no shorty
four second forties
banging sororities
arrest me hell, I'm the authority

Me and Judy side by side
enjoyed the ride
Took the bride
Got on a forum and I lied

I chose the username Razon
rhymes with Mason
He's amazin'
He popped from Judy while she was grazin'

I told the boys about Olongapo
another low
didn't know
I'd be forum branded a pedo

The truth is I was unathletic
more pathetic
it's copacetic
I prefer instead to wax poetic

Folks here now just see a fool
a forum tool
spew my drool
I basically peaked in high school

I think what people see here is a guy who has seen a lot and knows a lot, and they have a hard time relating because they are too limiterd in both experience and knowledge so they need to try and even things out by acting like you do.

And ya suck at poetry, that was sad.

[Clipper Nation]

I would never act retarded just to troll
You don't have to act. It comes naturally to you.

[DMC]

I think what people see here is a guy who has seen a lot and knows a lot, and they have a hard time relating because they are too limiterd in both experience and knowledge so they need to try and even things out by acting like you do.

And ya suck at poetry, that was sad.

Says the fat faggot who registered "Razon".

[Avante]

You don't have to act. It comes naturally to you.

That coming from a guy who....TOM SAVAGE IS THE BEST.....hahahaha~~~ Tell us all about "Struggle" who is soon to be voted the 12ish best player in the league....ok? Tell us about....he muffed the punt, hahaha.....who just got voted the 40th best player.

Little man, shut the fuck up.....ok? You're too damn dumb to even have an opinion.

[Avante]

Says the fat faggot who registered "Razon".

No I didn't, so why lie?

[Clipper Nation]

That coming from a guy who....TOM SAVAGE IS THE BEST.....hahahaha~~~ Tell us all about "Struggle" who is soon to be voted the 12ish best player in the league....ok? Tell us about....he muffed the punt, hahaha.....who just got voted the 40th best player.

Little man, shut the fuck up.....ok? You're too damn dumb to even have an opinion.
https://i.imgur.com/kwaMeqw.gif

[Avante]

https://i.imgur.com/kwaMeqw.gif

Translation

Avante kicking my little dumbass yet again, yep, he's right I'm stupid. So I need to play this stupid shit, it's all I can do. I need to stay on my level.

[Avante]

This really is so unfair, hahahaha~~~~~~~~~~~:lol

[Clipper Nation]

Translation

Avante kicking my little dumbass yet again, yep, he's right I'm stupid. So I need to play this stupid shit, it's all I can do. I need to stay on my level.

https://i.imgur.com/g1Qd6hS.gif

[Avante]

https://i.imgur.com/g1Qd6hS.gif

Poor little guy, and he doesn't even see it, hahahaha~~~~~~~~~~~~~

[BD24]

So ya lack creativity, right? All you are capable of is stupid bullshit, right? Dude, I see you as one dumb mutherfucker and ya never do anything to change that, got it bitch?
You could have just said that you suck at poetry instead of getting so angry tbh.

[Avante]

You could have just said that you suck at poetry instead of getting so angry tbh.

You actually read what others type?

I've had poems winning contests, published in papers, read to creative writing classes. I know I'm talented as does everyone else who understands poetry.

Give me a real (not stupid) fictious scenario and watch what happens.

[Avante]

"Cadillac"

I was feelin' weary
right down to the bone
also flat broke
and far from home

so I stuck out
a thumb
looking to hitch a ride
when an old man in a Cadillac
pulled up beside

ya don't look so good son
he said with a toothless grin
thats when I took out my knife
and cut that old fuck from eye ball
to chin

now I own a Cadillac
cruising down HWY 99
not a care in the world
and plenty of time

[Blake]

Awful

[pgardn]

I’m gonna be ill.

Please be cremated with your 8 tracks and poetry.

[Avante]

I’m gonna be ill.

Please be cremated with your 8 tracks and poetry.

We have a know nothing stalker, and a guy who thinks talking curves is talking track, trying to play critics, hahahahaha~~~~~~

Give Avante a fictious situation and watch the magic.

[Avante]

"The Stranger"

I was awaken
in the middle of the night
someone at my door
this ain't right

I ran downstairs
opened the door

someone finish this for me.

[pgardn]

We have a know nothing stalker, and a guy who thinks talking curves is talking track, trying to play critics, hahahahaha~~~~~~

Give Avante a fictious situation and watch the magic.

A runner of mass m begins to run on a perfect horizontal surface and rounds a turn of radius r with a speed of v. What is the acceleration of the runner?

[pgardn]

"The Stranger"

I was awaken
in the middle of the night
someone at my door
this ain't right

I ran downstairs
opened the door

someone finish this for me.

You are so incredibly predictable.
God You are awful.

Ill finish part of it for YOU:

Avante salivates,
it’s a little girl

[Avante]

A runner of mass m begins to run on a perfect horizontal surface and rounds a turn of radius r with a speed of v. What is the acceleration of the runner?

This is why ya bore everyone, do you honestly believe anyone but a freak like you would care about silly shit like that?

If ya plan on talking track talk about the athletes involved, the times being ran. A 19 year old Cuban kid just jumped 28-11 in the long jhump..THAT...is what people care about. And stuff you know nothing about.

Dude, pull your head out of your ass, ok?

fan...so if a runner of mass m....
another fan...dude, shut the fuck up, ok?

[Avante]

You are so incredibly predictable.
God You are awful.

Ill finish part of it for YOU:

Avante salivates,
it’s a little girl

Dude, ya try too hard at...BOOOO AVANTE.....to the point of looking retarded, honest. Ya can't ...YA SUCK....all the time, ok? Ya need a....that was good...not bad...that was bad....then people pay attention. When ya make it so damn obvious EVERYTHING AVANTE DOES SUCKS.....ya get turned off with...just some idiot.

[pgardn]

Dude, ya try too hard at...BOOOO AVANTE.....to the point of looking retarded, honest. Ya can't ...YA SUCK....all the time, ok? Ya need a....that was good...not bad...that was bad....then people pay attention. When ya make it so damn obvious EVERYTHING AVANTE DOES SUCKS.....ya get turned off with...just some idiot.


Its repetitive drivel.

There is no variation.
So stop.

[Avante]

Little people, it really doesn't work, so why play the same old stupid shit? Don't ya ever get tired of it? Everyone can see the knowledge, the talent, it's obvious. So instead of acting like dumb ass little cowards why not pick up on things, I sure would.

All thru school my poems were praised ny everyone who read them, there were in the school paper, in the local newspaper. Read in my JC classes. I'm good and you all see it. This need to act stupid over Avante...ALL THE TIME...why?

22 year old kid wil be hung in the morning, talking the old west, poem this for me.

[pgardn]

This is why ya bore everyone, do you honestly believe anyone but a freak like you would care about silly shit like that?

If ya plan on talking track talk about the athletes involved, the times being ran. A 19 year old Cuban kid just jumped 28-11 in the long jhump..THAT...is what people care about. And stuff you know nothing about.

Dude, pull your head out of your ass, ok?

fan...so if a runner of mass m....
another fan...dude, shut the fuck up, ok?

You asked for it, you got it, and then you cry like a little weeny yet you are 60 something...
I bore you cause you can’t get it, I understand this. It’s what children do when they fail.

“ I bored, don’t wanna think, give me candy, this is too hard.”

Its okay. You are legitimately shallow and stupid.

[Avante]

Its repetitive drivel.

There is no variation.
So stop.

Dude, don't read it then, ok bitch?

[pgardn]

Dude, don't read it then, ok bitch?

You put it up for criticism.
Be prepared to be gut punched.
Reality is your bitch, not me.
Live with it or just quit.

[Avante]

You asked for it, you got it, and then you cry like a little weeny yet you are 60 something...
I bore you cause you can’t get it, I understand this. It’s what children do when they fail.

“ I bored, don’t wanna think, give me candy, this is too hard.”

Its okay. You are legitimately shallow and stupid.

Take all that boring ass shit to a track forum, you will be told this......NOBODY CARES...trust me. And a dummy like you wants to talk shallow and stupid?

Go to...Let's Run....a simple Google would work, and ask that questiom, watch what happens.

Dude,talk about the action or shut the fuck up, got it?

What is your take on USC's Michael Norman?

[Avante]

You put it up for criticism.
Be prepared to be gut punched.
Reality is your bitch, not me.
Live with it or just quit.

So show us how it's done then, prove you can be a legit critic.

ya just ran out of gas between Houston and El Paso.....poem it.

Come on guy, let's see what ya got. Then I'll show ya how it's really done.

[pgardn]

So show us how it's done then, prove you can be a legit critic.

You think because I rate you awful I’m going to be good?

You are just lost.
There are creators and appreciators.
You fancy yourself as a creator.
Im rating you awful.

Thats the deal.
Got it?

You are a repetitive yunce.
You love dem blues so you can create dem blues?
It does not necessarily work that way. You are one of the older folks I would normally look to for insight but you suck and are self-delusional.

[Avante]

You think because I rate you awful I’m going to be good?

You are just lost.
There are creators and appreciators.
You fancy yourself as a creator.
Im rating you awful.

Thats the deal.
Got it?

You are a repetitive yunce.
You love dem blues so you can create dem blues?
It does not necessarily work that way. You are one of the older folks I would normally look to for insight but you suck and are self-delusional.

Dude, I play blues harmonica and can moan them blues.

So ya can't do anything but run your mouth, how is it I knew that?

Dude, talk to me about USC sprinter Michael Norman, let me guess, who? Yet you know track,hahahahaha~~~~~~~


Dude, shut the fuck up,ok?

[pgardn]

Take all that boring ass shit to a track forum, you will be told this......NOBODY CARES...trust me. And a dummy like you wants to talk shallow and stupid?

Go to...Let's Run....a simple Google would work, and ask that questiom, watch what happens.

Dude,talk about the action or shut the fuck up, got it?

What is your take on USC's Michael Norman?

Explain in your own words why a straight 200 is faster than a curved 200?

Tracks were built for stadium viewing you dunce. So they must incorporate turns. This has totally escaped you. You have been thrown off the best track board on the internet, I have not, what does that say about YOU? Just think for once in your life.

[Avante]

Funny....

idiot....you suck
Avante..ok, you try it.
idiot...ah..well...I don't .....

Hahahahahaha~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~:lol

[pgardn]

Dude, I play blues harmonica and can moan them blues.

So ya can't do anything but run your mouth, how is it I knew that?

Dude, talk to me about USC sprinter Michael Norman, let me guess, who? Yet you know track,hahahahaha~~~~~~~


Dude, shut the fuck up,ok?

You can moan?

Bravo!

[pgardn]

Funny....

idiot....you suck
Avante..ok, you try it.
idiot...ah..well...I don't .....

Hahahahahaha~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~:lol

Im not doing the bragging.
Just the testing of big headed liars.
You.

[Avante]

Explain in your own words why a straight 200 is faster than a curved 200?

Tracks were built for stadium viewing you dunce. So they must incorporate turns. This has totally escaped you. You have been thrown off the best track board on the internet, I have not, what does that say about YOU? Just think for once in your life.

You can't read guy? I said talk to me about USC's Michael Norman, ok? Do you not get how to talk with people? It's not...fuck what you asked, here answer this...ok?

[Avante]

Im not doing the bragging.
Just the testing of big headed liars.
You.

You don't do anything little man. Show us something other than boring ass shit and that constant wimper of yours, can you?

[pgardn]

You can't read guy? I said talk to me about USC's Michael Norman, ok? Do you not get how to talk with people? It's not...fuck what you asked, here answer this...ok?

You don’t know track.
You know names because you can type and hit search.

[pgardn]

You don't do anything little man. Show us something other than boring ass shit and that constant wimper of yours, can you?

Sure.
Why Are turns difficult?

Ill explain once you give the answer I have already given you over and over,
I just understand and run better than you do. I know it’s hard, but it IS.

[Avante]

You don’t know track.
You know names because you can type and hit search.

So ya know nothing about Michael Norman? But you know track, hahahahaha~~~~~~~~~~~

Dummy the NCCA's were on....TV...ok ya dummy?

Stupid, over 50 years of Track & Field News magazine.....but I search.....hahahahaha~~~~~~~~~~


Dumbass can't even talk the huge stars of the sport, what an idiot.

[pgardn]

So ya know nothing about Michael Norman? But you know track, hahahahaha~~~~~~~~~~~

Dummy the NCCA's were on....TV...ok ya dummy?

Stupid, over 50 years of Track & Field News magazine.....but I search.....hahahahaha~~~~~~~~~~


Dumbass can't even talk the huge stars of the sport, what an idiot.

Nahhh.
Did I miss them?

Saw the 19 yo jump 8.83 m in something bigger.
Tells us something about long talent relaxing?


Just shut the fck up.
You are getting clowned.

[Avante]

[QUOTE=pgardn;9417218]You can moan?

Bravo![


Dude, ya worry way too much about Avante,why?

[Avante]

Nahhh.
Did I miss them?

Saw the 19 yo jump 8.83 m in something bigger.
Tells us something about long talent relaxing?


Just shut the fck up.
You are getting clowned.
The only one being clowned here ya little shit is you.


Too stupid to figure,,....AVANTE FOLLOWS TRACK.

Stupid, talk to me about what we can expect to see in the 100m at the up coming Nationals. Yep, no clue.

[Avante]

Right now Ronnie Baker is looking good, and should be considered the fav at our Nationals. The status of Christian Coleman is...? And just how many more seasons can Justin Gatlin/Tyson Gay stay relevent? NCCA champ Cameron Burrell should be in the mix. Not sure what happened to Jaylen Bacon, curious about his 2018 now.

Noah Lyles wins the 200m. But.....nowhere close to SFS's 19.5.

[Blake]

This is why ya bore everyone, do you honestly believe anyone but a freak like you would care about silly shit like that?

What everyone here has been telling you for years

[Blake]

The only one being clowned here ya little shit is you.

Lack of message board awareness