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Tough to read any of this bull without an actual picture of the Lunar Goddess. Until you provide that I don't see the point of continuing.
The Lunar Goddess - East New York
I drive towards, East New York
Coming with goddess, across yellow river
Sky is so clear, in the sunny spring
We see the nice scenery, hear the goddess sing
Driving slow, towards our home
Never tired on the road
East New York
Celestial port, it's our home
Where we go
I've dreamed it, us being together
Lunar goddess 'n' hometown stranger
Wish I had power, to freeze the time
Extend this moment, till the end of my life
Driving slow, towards our home
Never tired on the road
East New York
Celestial Port, it's our home
Where we go
Heading all the way to South-west Vil where you lived
Having a walk near that horse-shoe lake
Up there the same moon I could see
That rekindled all my memories of yesterday, yesterday
Driving slow, towards our home
Never tired on the road
East New York
Celestial port, it's our home
Where we go
Last edited by Franklin; 08-15-2014 at 07:18 PM.
Tough to read any of this bull without an actual picture of the Lunar Goddess. Until you provide that I don't see the point of continuing.
Knowing that the "Lunar Goddess" is probably going to play a significant role in my real life in the future (hope so) and the fact that many posters on Spurstalk are inglorious perverts (you know who they are), I'd rather not show her pic publicly on Spurstalk even though she looks pretty as , and that's also why I have no plan to change my Scarlett avi to a LG one. My Reck has seen her pic and he speaks highly of her, he rates her nearly as high as Scarlett which says enough.
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East New York: It's my hometown... no it's not in the US, not even close, it's an Asian coastal city located at the exact same la ude as NY. I've always considered my hometown "East New York" since I first developed the Scarlett enthusiasm (New York is Scarlett's hometown).
Hometown Stranger: It is me. I once wrote an autobiographic novel led "Stranger in Hometown".
Honest opinion, the word, "campus" sticks out like a sore thumb. It's an ugly word and too specific for your otherwise nice work.
So what alternative do you suggest, bro? LG and I are schoolmates and there's no other intersections between us except that at this point of time. Plus, the horse-shoe lake is a pond on the campus of our university.
Thanks Reck, and thanks to CTOA as well despite him being a longtime Goddess hater. This is the 3rd finest poem/lyric I've composed imho, only next to the first poem and the "yesterday" poem. It does take a classic song for me to write a good poem tbh, hope LG likes it, I'm gonna post it on my page this coming Sunday (as usual).
Son, send me the original Scarlett poems to my email. I'm going to take the time to read up on them.Thanks Reck
original Scarlett poems? I didn't write no poem for Scarlett imho, the first poem I mentioned was the one I composed for LG's birthday last July. I didn't intend to fall in love for her back then tbh, I just wrote that poem as a gift for her birthday and a method of showing my gratefulness to her. I didn't even know I actually liked her until you pointed it out tbh
Below is the first Lunar Goddess poem
The Lunar Goddess
Sky is cold, air so quiet
being alone the lonely night
when the dark has dimmed my way home
you give me the soft light
Your face lovely and white
smooth pearl like
but why always hide part behind long hair
only come full one month a time
Lend me a pair of wings
so I can fly
toward where you at, while I still have breath
you're a goddess in my eyes
gazing at buxom outline
for a million years
you're full of wonders
heal my soul, fill my life...
Just take a picture of the back of her head next time you're in class. I'll be able to read your poems while imagining I'm behind her, stalking. I'll be able to see her through your eyes.
By poem I meant the Hometown piece you made.original Scarlett poems? I didn't write no poem for Scarlett imho, the first poem I mentioned was the one I composed for LG's birthday last July. I didn't intend to fall in love for her back then tbh, I just wrote that poem as a gift for her birthday and a method of showing my gratefulness to her. I didn't even know I actually liked her until you pointed it out tbh
Below is the first Lunar Goddess poem
IDK. I don't want to just throw out words for your poem. But maybe use something less specific that still means the same to you and her but can also be more openly interpreted. You've already got the horse-shoe lake. I would just try to use a word more poetic than "campus" in this otherwise nice work. IMO.
If there are no pictures of Lunar Goddess by midnight you are officially a got. No more hiding behind celibacy.
Thanks for the advice bro, I changed it to "South-west Vil". South-west Vil is part of the campus where LG currently lives in a rented apartment, only people from our school know what SW Vil and horse-shoe lake mean, tbh.
You summon me to act like a man and post straight the pics of the girl I love, I understand it bro and I'm thankful for your encouragement but I'm not gonna post her pic on a public message board, I can't even ask for her consent because there's nothing official between us yet.
Plus, I don't see the incompatibility of me being a LG fan and being a celibate. I've been a Scarlett fan and a celibate at the same time and it works fine. I don't have to bring a girl to my bed to love her, tbh. Even if LG doesn't have no interest at all in making anything serious (like a relationship) with me, I still wouldn't feel too disappointed because I've reaped such romantic experiences and literature. I just want LG to live a happy life here, getting a job she desires and marrying some guy she loves and is loved by. I don't wanna impose no burden on LG, I ain't gonna ask her to do anything, but I'd like to do anything for her tbh.
Last edited by Franklin; 08-15-2014 at 08:15 PM.
It's better. Not exactly what I was thinking but it's your poem and goddess.
Thanks. I'm gonna let LG see it tomorrow, hope she will like it too...
Why don't you draw me a picture of her. I need something to visualize when I read your crap.
Desperate fat, unnatractive who cant get his own so he asks for pictures to jack off to.
Desperate fat, unnatractive who cant get his own so he asks for pictures to jack off to.
Wait until LG officially becomes my significant other (if it ever happens). I'll ask for her consent and if she agrees, I'll then post some of her pics here. She's my Lunar Goddess and I wouldn't even do the lightest things that might make her unhappy, tbh.
If she ends up being nothing special to me but a common friend, I'm afraid it'd be very hard for a common friend to ask for her consent to post her pictures on a public message board. I would be satisfied either way, nonetheless, I'm even internally hoping for the latter because in that case I'd be able to remain a proud celibate while being a friend of hers. However, if she wants something more, I will certainly conform because I feel I can never decline any of Goddess's requests, tbh
I'm not gonna only post one poem on my social networking webpage this weekend, but two... I logged on twitter earlier tonight (chinese version twitter, of course) and learned that my best female friend Rhea fell off the stairs yesterday and injured herself
Mark, Don't Cry - For Rhea...
I've logged on my twitter
On this rainy Sunday, the same noontime
Didn't know what I would find
Until I saw the news, my heart sliced
I tried to pretend as if
It meant zero on my mind
I have tried to ignore it
But still felt tears in my eyes
Mark please, don't cry
Mark, don't cry
Wish I were a cushion at your feet
Took the hit so you'd suffer no bruise
I wanted to turn into cream
Show me the hurt for me to soothe
Not sure how serious is it
But I know you'll be fine
I tried to console myself
But couldn't beat tears back
Oh Mark, don’t cry
I don't know what to do for you
On request I'll come to your aid
I will look for the best cure
Hoping it will alleviate your pain
I ignored your reply
To my poem Monday night
I wish that it's not too late yet
For me to genuinely apologize
It was because I was too shy
To tell how much I felt delight
We're all standing by your side
Soon again we'll see your smile
Oh Rhea, don't cry
Bessie, don't cry
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