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    moral victory, tbh. Franklin's Avatar
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    The Lunar Goddess - dough flower


    There's an old restaurant
    in East New York town
    It's where I was made
    Into a dough flower
    For someone I had to wait
    A goddess in soft white lace
    She would give me bliss
    That I'd always craved

    Don't leave me in hot steam
    Don’t leave me in hot steam
    I'd be lost and never found
    Unless you'll turn around
    And get me out of hot steam

    She picks me up with fingers
    That are so slender
    I try to cool myself down
    So she wouldn't feel hurt
    There's much more to remember
    Sunglasses and her shoe color
    And the sweetest voice that
    I have ever heard

    Don't leave me in hot steam
    Don't leave me in hot steam
    I'd miss her face and sound
    I'd be crying to the ground
    Don't leave me in hot steam

    Only goddess knows
    What I am wondering about
    she puts me up for a sniff
    Then into her mouth
    I'm gonna come close to her heart
    Of her I'm gonna be a part
    This is the way
    I'll be alive until next century

    It is a dough flower's dream
    It is a dough flower's dream
    I'm singing my prayers loud
    I will never have no doubt
    It is a dough flower's dream
    Last edited by Franklin; 08-23-2014 at 03:58 AM.

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    moral victory, tbh. Franklin's Avatar
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    LG posted a pic on her page on Thursday, in which she was eating this food (see the pic above) in a chinese restaurant with a female friend, and yes it gave me the inspiration for another poem (derived from another Scarlett song - Fannin Street). I don't know what is called in English so I just named it "dough flower", our town is kinda famous for that food I think. I wrote the poem first person from the perspective of the "dough flower", hope LG will like it.

    Plus, she looks much prettier than the last pic she posted on her page (the pic I sent to Reck), and she looks so differently than her old pics (pics from last year). It seems like her facial look has changed so much during the past 2-3 months, and she looks pretty much like me now... Could it be possible that she had also been liking me secretly, gazing at my pics so much even her look changed gradually? I'm happy and proud to be a celibate, as you guys know, but I don't wanna miss out on someone who really likes me (if that's the case). What shall I do? Or Should I do nothing at all except posting the weekly poems on my page, leaving things the way they are until the right time/chance come?

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    You've had better ones but

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    I really don't care for it tbh. Are you writing just for her and yourself? Or do you want it to affect other readers as well?

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    moral victory, tbh. Franklin's Avatar
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    Agree, this ain't the finest work I've done. I know it's wrong to blame the song (it's a Scarlett song) but sometimes it does take a classic song like Yesterday or Country Road, Take me Home for me to write a good poem. It turns out that two of the best poems I've made so far are derived from those songs. Thanks for your attention and approval again.

    And thanks to CTOA as well. I'm basically just writing for her, though I also make the poems visible to two other friends in my real life (one is Fernando my homeboy and the other is Rhea). I wish someday I could get those s published (with LG's consent, of course), so I don't want many people to see these poems, although most of them already know more or less about my affections for LG.

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