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    Believe. Black Stan's Avatar
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    So I'm going to give this a shot. Mr. Biggles, my creetiv creative writing teacher at PC told me I need to start writing every day. Poum, stories, thoughts. Said the more I write, the better it gets.
    Mamma always said that you gots to put in teh work to enjoy the frutes of success.

    Poum 1 by Stan

    The Monkey and the Hippo

    The monkey in the tree looked down on the ground
    to see 2 hippos walking on the ground
    one hippo went away to play for the day
    and the other hippo was sad
    and the monkey felt bad

    The monkey dropped down and sat on the ground
    and said to the female hippo what's wrong with you bae?
    The hippo needed things to be done
    and the monkey thought it would be fun

    They talked alot and the monkey did thought
    that he might like this hippo more than a lot

    Then the male hippo returned and theft
    so the monkey he left
    but he wanted to return to the female hippo
    later because he said so

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    it's kind of like Flags of Our Fathers/Letters from Iwo Jima.
    Or maybe the Summer Nights song from Grease.
    Two perspectives from the same event.
    IMO

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    What do you think about Stan’s poum Larry?

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    Believe. Black Stan's Avatar
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    Share My Love by Stan

    See you baby and it makes me pain
    See you baby with gravy stains
    See you baby we could have it made
    Me and you baby in an Escalade

    Wish I could have the balls to say
    to you what I want to do today
    You love another man
    But I wish it was me Stan
    But it's not but i think you like me
    I want to see you when you go pee
    Because I think I could love you
    But like Romeyo and Julie Ett
    Our love can't happen yet

    Do I need to make this done
    and go and get my gun
    and get rid of that man who makes you no fun
    Then we can make that love run

    Get us an Escolade
    and we have it made

    by Stan

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    Perfect fit


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    Believe.
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    Stan worked the streets down around BILLINGS AVE in Harlem, he had a small but loyal following..............

    Come on Stan let's see whatcha got, do something with that and then I'll show ya how it's done.

    All that above was stupid.
    Last edited by Avant; 05-21-2019 at 11:43 PM.

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    White Angel

    Are you will be my White Angel?
    I want you to be my baby
    but I don't know how to say too you
    what it is I want to do

    You've seen my thing
    and I want to see yours
    Can I watch you when you pee?

    I see you in your window at night
    You look so sad and a lone.
    I want to jump in the window
    And let you hold my bone

    White angel I love you so much
    and we can meet and hunch
    and then I would take you out to lunch
    and buy you things a bunch

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    White Angel

    Are you will be my White Angel?
    I want you to be my baby
    but I don't know how to say too you
    what it is I want to do

    You've seen my thing
    and I want to see yours
    Can I watch you when you pee?

    I see you in your window at night
    You look so sad and a lone.
    I want to jump in the window
    And let you hold my bone

    White angel I love you so much
    and we can meet and hunch
    and then I would take you out to lunch
    and buy you things a bunch
    That was 100% garbage.

    Watch and learn.

    You are my white angel
    that is plain to see
    you arrived from Heaven
    just to be with me

    you bring your love
    as only an Angel can do
    so righteous
    so true

    I see you at night
    when you are all alone
    obviously thinking of me
    and my long black bone

    my White Angel
    what more can I say
    without your love
    I'd just as soon
    dry up and blow away

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    Believe.
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    Rookies sheesh~~~~~~~~~~~

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    That was 100% garbage.

    Watch and learn.

    You are my white angel
    that is plain to see
    you arrived from Heaven
    just to be with me

    you bring your love
    as only an Angel can do
    so righteous
    so true

    I see you at night
    when you are all alone
    obviously thinking of me
    and my long black bone

    my White Angel
    what more can I say
    without your love
    I'd just as soon
    dry up and blow away
    You don’t understand getting in character do you dip ? The poems are clearly falling in line with what the black Stan character has been built to be. Show some range you sick pedo

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    Steal yo - By Stan

    You don't no how to treat yo woman
    I'm gonna steal yo
    I see those bruises on her face
    I'm gonna steal yo

    We kinda friends
    But I'm gonna steal yo
    and she'll be happy when she's with me
    we'll go out to eat all the time

    I'm gonna steal yo
    And it won't even be stealing
    Because she's will leave you
    And be happy with me, Stan

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    Stan doesn't waste time rhyming when he gets pissed

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    That was 100% garbage.

    Watch and learn.

    You are my white angel
    that is plain to see
    you arrived from Heaven
    just to be with me

    you bring your love
    as only an Angel can do
    so righteous
    so true

    I see you at night
    when you are all alone
    obviously thinking of me
    and my long black bone

    my White Angel
    what more can I say
    without your love
    I'd just as soon
    dry up and blow away
    God... you are perfectly awful.

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    Who Peepin

    Who that peepin in yo bedroom window
    Who that creepin in the bushes yo
    You all alone
    Is you husband home
    Or is he messin round on that computer yo

    Wake up and see who that is creepin
    and look into those eyes that be peepin
    Who that wanna make love you
    It's me, Stan

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    probably my personal favorite so far

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    dear diary >>

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    I’m quite sure that we’ll see Stan evolve as a writer and wouldn’t be surprised if he branches out and begins to feel comfortable with sharing his feelings through personal thoughts.

    He’s only just now enrolled in creative writing at the local community college. We know this from his first entry.

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    I’m quite sure that we’ll see Stan evolve as a writer and wouldn’t be surprised if he branches out and begins to feel comfortable with sharing his feelings through personal thoughts.

    He’s only just now enrolled in creative writing at the local community college. We know this from his first entry.
    Stan's come a long way.

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    Stan's come a long way.
    Had to step up his game for Judy

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    Stan goes in and out of his prose.

    Good with contractions, which Stan would not use. Stan would say "you had" instead of "you've",

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    That was 100% garbage.

    Watch and learn.

    You are my white angel
    that is plain to see
    you arrived from Heaven
    just to be with me

    you bring your love
    as only an Angel can do
    so righteous
    so true

    I see you at night
    when you are all alone
    obviously thinking of me
    and my long black bone

    my White Angel
    what more can I say
    without your love
    I'd just as soon
    dry up and blow away
    That "see you at night when you are alone" part is creepy. If she's alone, where the are you watching from? Why do I get the feeling "white angel" is 11 years old?

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    Stan goes in and out of his prose.

    Good with contractions, which Stan would not use. Stan would say "you had" instead of "you've",
    He’s in a creative writing class. I don’t think you can judge his ability based on what is surely a transitional period for him. Especially since he clearly gets emotional when writing. I give him a pass on his inconsistency and write it off as him simply trying to find his voice.

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    Believe.
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    Who Peepin

    Who that peepin in yo bedroom window
    Who that creepin in the bushes yo
    You all alone
    Is you husband home
    Or is he messin round on that computer yo

    Wake up and see who that is creepin
    and look into those eyes that be peepin
    Who that wanna make love you
    It's me, Stan
    Dude, you have...0...talent, that was simply re ed.

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    Who Peepin

    Who that peepin in yo bedroom window
    Who that creepin in the bushes yo
    You all alone
    Is you husband home
    Or is he messin round on that computer yo

    Wake up and see who that is creepin
    and look into those eyes that be peepin
    Who that wanna make love you
    It's me, Stan


    Edgar Allan Yoe

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