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What she said.
I'd like to see the Spurs trade Bonner--not because he's awful, but because we need a bench Pop is willing to play.
Well, each fan base has to have different expctations of their team.
What she said.
I'd like to see the Spurs trade Bonner--not because he's awful, but because we need a bench Pop is willing to play.
Thank you for the write-up. Before this, I thought Mason was a mean power forward who could dribble and shoot free throws funny.
As far as critiques, I guess you are wanting to get into writing as a possible career? If so, I hope you stick with it!
I think you supplied a good amount of information with a friendly style. What I would watch out for is excess words (a no-no in professional writing). The old advice is to pretend _you_ have to pay for each word, like in a telegram. That should help make your sentences leaner and cleaner. It will feel strange and empty at first, but it will help you develop a truly professional style.
This is a little awkward:
"But again, the Spurs went on another path very few of us actually thought they would go by signing 6'5" swingman Roger Mason Jr. from the Washington Wizards."
Some things work in speech but not on paper. This sentence feels a bit clumsy and labored. Let's see what we could cut.
"The Spurs went on another path very few of us actually thought they would go by signing 6'5" swingman Roger Mason Jr. from the Washington Wizards." (do we need But again? Remember, you're paying!)
"The Spurs went on a path very few of us actually thought they would go by signing 6'5" swingman Roger Mason Jr. from the Washington Wizards." (exchanged a for another--possibly smoother)
"The Spurs went on an unexpected path by signing 6'5" swingman Roger Mason Jr. from the Washington Wizards." (saved more money! The sentence flows better, I think. Also: surprising, shocking, etc.)
"The Spurs took an unexpected path by signing 6'5" swingman Roger Mason Jr. from the Washington Wizards."
(exchanged "took" for "went on")
This is just an example of the fine-toothed comb you can use to tame yo nappy sentences. I realize you probably didn't spend so much time being anal about it, but it's simply an exercise you can use to make your sentences more efficient, more in-line with journalistic conventions, ane ultimately more marketable.
The second advice is to use active, colorful verbs whenever possible. Like Vitale, adding a little e can, sometimes, polish a turd.
Please don't take all this as negative--I'm no pro myself! Good luck and keep up the good work!
Thanks a lot. I didn't take any of it as negative, I'm just out trying to improve myself.
Wouldn't mind seeing that scenario pan out at all.
He needs a haircut.
Dorell Wright will get too many suitors, no? We have a wee slice of the MLE left; can't see many bargains with that.
Neither Najera or Dorrell Wright are realistic options at this point.
I think the QO to Wright was actually somewhere above what the Spurs have left in the MLE. If Miami thought enough of him to extend the QO, they'll gladly match a multi-year deal for less than it.
The Spurs are ed either way they go with you people.
I'm mystified why they gave so much money to Roger Mason.
What again was your plan for picking up players Mr Body, just so you're on record?
I'm having difficulty believing that you are unable to follow the logic. Did you suffer a head injury?
Excuse me, did your asshole just talk?
I've not read every post here, so forgive me if this has been addressed previously.
1) The market on Kurt Thomas might be hotter than anticipated. Perhaps the Spurs knew that using their full MLE and giving Thomas a contract that would keep him in San Antonio without incurring tax was not a possibility. Mason might represent the best use of a partial MLE signing. This is debatable on a couple levels, but $$$ attached to Kurt Thomas' contract should shed some light.
2) The Spurs are putting their money where their mouth is regarding the projected play of Hill, Hairston, and Mahinmi. They're either really smart or really stupid, if this is the case.
3) At this point, I think there is a strong possibility that some free agent(s) will slip through the cracks and have to accept an Ime Udoka type contract at the end of free agent season. Who knows, maybe someone like Azubuike will remain. The Spurs should stand pat and see who shakes out prior to signing another player. This also gives them a chance to look at summer league.
They won't sing another player whose name is not Kurt Thomas until late July/early August.
4) If Buford needs something to do in the meantime, he should shop the TE and Matt Bonner, simply to see what's available. I'm still of the opinion that the Spurs should package Bonner and a couple 2009 2nd round drafts picks to see what they can fetch.
I think this signing shows Gist and Hairston will be riding D League next season.
I think you're putting way too much thought into the Thomas situation.
We paid Mason more because we needed him to accept a two year deal.
Don't forget, it's who when you're speaking about the subject of the sentence and whom when you're speaking about the object.
....or is it.....the other way around?
Oh, who gives a ?
Or is it whom gives a ?
Yes. See the above quote for proof.
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