I think he has more potential as a filmmaker than you do as a tattoo scratcher.
I agree.
Month ago, a guy exchanged a half gram of meth for a tattoo. He wanted a wolf. Koriwhat smoked the meth and went to work. Here's the result:
Now you might be thinking he ed it up because he was high. Nope. Koriwhat actually tattoos better when he's on meth. If he performed sober, it wouldn't have even resembled a wolf and probably looked like a duck with canines.
Here's a hint: Do what's already been done. People will like it more.
Wow pot kettle black.
It's one thing to give pointers if you know something about it, but there's no reason to pretend you know filming if you don't. Leave that to Mouse.
I liked it. I liked the music because it gave me that "build up" feeling but I felt it went on too long. It should've stopped right when the gun was pointed at his head imho. I know you was experimenting but I didn't like the vintage visuals.
Good short though.
I enjoyed it. From the outside, not a pro or anything, I think the words they spoke were a little too obvious, but I liked it. I liked the videography, tbh...thought the shot was done well. Directing was good...just an outsider's opinion.
I appreciate the feedback, but again that sounds like every hitman/action/tension filled scene ever. Every single one of those has the exact same formula. Why not put the audience on the edge of their seats right from the start?
Ah so you mean like go right to silence when the gun points at his head? I switched scores at that point, but if thats what you mean, that makes sense and I am actually going to test that in final cut pro.
Have the black guy take off his shades. The shades wearing hitman thing is overdone. He's indoors. He has no personality because of it.
The glass table is not a place to slam someone's head. He doesn't need to do that.
His door was unlocked. That's pretty stupid.
He didn't hear the guy come in and close the door.
Have a knock at the door. Have the guy get his gun and go see who it is. Have the black guy then enter through the sliding glass door and put the gun to the back of the white man's head and about the time the white man answers the door, the black guy blow his brains all over the face of the guy who's at the door, a pizza delivery guy. So the brains land all over the pizza.
The last scene is the black guy eating the pizza.
Because you would be giving things away and the audience will be prepped...so when the action or drama takes place...no-one will be surprised...
also...as far as being original...I can appreciate that...but it also has to be good and entertaining....just because you are fond of certain "original" shots and techniques doesn't mean that it will translate well to an audience...what you may consider fresh and original might just seem boring and amateurish---if not done well....and there is a fine line between them.
The reason every hitman/action/tension filled scene uses these shots is because they work..
when Tarantino came on the scene...he used a lot of cliches...but for the time...he threw in some interesting dialogue...some film noir style or at ude...and it just seemed fresh...at the time. He took what was outdated and stamped his style and suddenly every hollywood screenwriter was writing film noir type scripts...
I suddenly realized why I posted in the first place....
The music...
If the music was more appropriate...it might cover or not expose these flaws--in my opinion.
keep dreaming you're something special by repeatedly trying to diss me... then realize you spend 99% of your time here on ST. wake up call!
dialogue sucks
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