Avante, rate this poem, tbh.
The Lunar Goddess
Sky is cold, air so quiet
being alone the lonely night
when the dark has dimmed my way home
you give me the soft light
Your face lovely and white
smooth pearl like
but why always hide part behind long hair
only come full one month a time
Lend me a pair of wings
so I can fly
toward where you at, while I still have breath
you're a goddess in my eyes
gazing at buxom outline
for a million years
you're full of wonders
heal my soul, fill my life...
Last edited by Franklin; 07-02-2014 at 12:44 AM.
Shadowflames I see you lurking.
lol
I'm waiting for the expert to chime in on the poem.
Imo, not one of Rogue's best but it's still cool to read about goddess from the outside.
Lost me like half-way through, but it must be goddess speak tbh.
I like it.
You sold the feelings.
op is a got honestly
Don't with my fellow poet ya little prick, got it? Not beat it asshole.
Sorry, just fixed some spelling errors. I composed the poem yesterday and wrote it on a piece of paper, I was so excited when I was typing it on computer earlier tonight I somehow misspelled some words...
And thank you Avante, thank everyone who's made positive comments in this thread. This is probably the finest poem I've made (even better than the Scarlett Goddess of the Sun one) which I feel so proud of. I've been taking literature classes these days and I'm glad I've made my efforts pay off in a way.
No bull , you do have "it".
Sorry to you Shadow and to our Gummi as well... I don't wanna hurt your feelings but I have to be honest with you guys, the prototype of this poem isn't OUR Goddess tbh. It was a female classmate who gave me the initial inspiration for this poem, tomorrow is her birthday and I'd like to present this poem to her as a gift if a chance is given. I'm still pretty much focused on schoolwork and this one is just a short break for me from the tedious theories.lol
I'm waiting for the expert to chime in on the poem.
Imo, not one of Rogue's best but it's still cool to read about goddess from the outside.
She is the only appreciator of my works in my real life tbh, she told me she's read my Stranger in Hometown word by word and I knew she was 100% honest, and I also know that most of you (including shadow and thread) haven't even read 3 chapters of that novel. She's also read the first episode of the Goddess series maybe, I'm not sure. I haven't given her any other novels of mine and probably never will because they're too erotic and lewd... I don't wanna ruin the life of a innocent girl's with my ty writings, tbh. Yet I'm still so grateful, and I hope she can join our Goddess fan club someday. The Goddess fan club should never exclude females tbh, Goddess is a gift from the God, a blessing to both genders imho.
wheres the verse she gets pump by french got?
You didn't even read the post above, did you? You just exploit every chance to talk about Goddess like a fly chasing rotten dog s. This poem ain't even about Goddess, to begin with. And the ty comments from sorry s like you guys are least wanted in this thread tbh, gtfo.
Her movies suck, she's such a bore
Scarlet Jo, the goddess
Boob jobs, nose jobs never stop
Hopefully her lips will pop
Her vagina smells like rotten socks
Her uterine wall is hard as rocks
Snaggle teeth and hammer toes
Pubic lice and ho ho hos
She's not too bright, no sense of humor
It could be Aids or a big brain tumor
But after all, I really must say
That Lucy flick looks pretty OK
That is really a beautiful tribute to Goddess Franklin…
I love poetry…Since I have no such skilz here is one of my favorites….
Whenever Richard Cory went down town,
We people on the pavement looked at him:
He was a gentleman from sole to crown,
Clean favored, and imperially slim.
And he was always quietly arrayed,
And he was always human when he talked;
But still he fluttered pulses when he said,
'Good-morning,' and he glittered when he walked.
And he was rich - yes, richer than a king -
And admirably schooled in every grace:
In fine, we thought that he was everything
To make us wish that we were in his place.
So on we worked, and waited for the light,
And went without the meat, and cursed the bread;
And Richard Cory, one calm summer night,
Went home and put a bullet through his head.
You people are too gullible tbh. This poem I wrote ain't even remotely associated with Goddess, I wrote this poem in regards to a female classmate who read thoroughly and appreciated my Stranger in Hometown as well as some other works of mine, it never had nothing to do with Scarlett the Goddess in the first place. She knows I'm a celibate and she's living a happy life in her own solid relationship, so don't get me wrong here. I also like her writings just as much as she appreciates mine, so it is at most just a pure friendship within the domain of literature, tbh, just like me with Avante and thread.
Scarlett is the solar Goddess (Goddess of the Sun) but I believe she might be a bit lonely up there in the sky, and she also needs a bit more rest with the French little bus in her bump. She needs an alt badly so I decided to build up a "Lunar Goddess" to accompany her, whoever the prototype is.
On the other hand, I'm really very grateful to that classmate who rekindled the enthusiasm about literature in my heart. I felt depleted of thoughts for the past few weeks in the theoretical studies, but now I feel reignited and my head replenished. I hadn't even talked to her at all for about half a year until recently we attended the class together, I thought she had already forgotten who the Mark Celibate is, but no, she still remembered me and every piece of writing I shared with her. She certainly deserves her own led work (even if it's as short as just a poem) composed by Mark, tbh. I should've written a novel for her but sadly neither she nor I have so much time to read/write a novel at this point of time. I think I can never say enough "thank you" to her, hope she can read this thread one day or another.
-Mark Celibate
Drats! We've been had.
Thanks, but I have to say sorry to you if you think the "goddess" in this specific poem is the same as the one we're all familiar with. Goddess is pregnant so I'd like to give her a break (until at least the French bas crawls out of her belly). But anyway, both the solar and lunar Goddesses are symbols of our common belief in happiness and sacredness, and they can appear in various forms according to the reader's prospective, imho.That is really a beautiful tribute to Goddess Franklin…
I love poetry…Since I have no such skilz here is one of my favorites….
Whenever Richard Cory went down town,
We people on the pavement looked at him:
He was a gentleman from sole to crown,
Clean favored, and imperially slim.
And he was always quietly arrayed,
And he was always human when he talked;
But still he fluttered pulses when he said,
'Good-morning,' and he glittered when he walked.
And he was rich - yes, richer than a king -
And admirably schooled in every grace:
In fine, we thought that he was everything
To make us wish that we were in his place.
So on we worked, and waited for the light,
And went without the meat, and cursed the bread;
And Richard Cory, one calm summer night,
Went home and put a bullet through his head.
And yeah, I admit I'm buying insurance with all these additional posts. So even if she reacts negatively after reading my poem, calling me a jerk and asking me to go , I'd still have the "art card" to play to sort of save some face, tbh
Still, it is a nice poem…
Egbert Celibate…
Thanks bro, hope the girl also thinks that way. Even if she thinks differently and talks massive against me, that'd still be better than no response at all from the "goddess". The solar Goddess Scarlett doesn't even give a about my artworks, at the very least the "lunar goddess" will respond no matter approvingly or disapprovingly.
ah damn CTOA stole and then sold it like it was his own thread...
Can't say I approve, but I'll make my peace with it.
Ah, my bad bro.
You must really like this girl to call her a straight up goddess and putting her in such high stature.
Celibacy need not apply with her F? My .
Good for you. Although I'm not sure how I feel about you calling me gullible though.
I'm not sure, bro. Celibacy is my religion and I don't see myself relinquishing it in the foreseeable future, for as long as I'm a student at least. I was taught to be a good student so I know what are the right things to do at school and what are not, and I've been a complete asshole to women since undergraduate years so I doubt any woman would ever like me if they know what a hardcore misogynist piece of I have been.Ah, my bad bro.
You must really like this girl to call her a straight up goddess and putting her in such high stature.
Celibacy need not apply with her F? My .
Good for you. Although I'm not sure how I feel about you calling me gullible though.
So, I don't think I like her as much as I want to thank her, tbh. I'm really grateful that someone in the real life actually reads and appreciates my works, and that's very important to the lonely heart of an obscure writer imho. I mean, for example, if a guy (like you) appreciates my works as much as she does I'd probably thank you just as much, tbh. Gender doesn't make much difference to a celibate, and the friendship between her and me (if it ever exists) is well beyond the level of human love, it is based on mutual understanding and spiritual belonging imho.
And of course when I used the word "gullible" I didn't include you, I hadn't told you guys the truth yet when you & Gummi made your posts, tbh.
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